Midnight Serenade

not sure about the title. but its a bit different than usual for me.

 

Playing a midnight serenade

In this starry moonlit night

So black as my heart

As it aches for you tonight

 

Playing so softly

As I'm wishing for you near

Hoping to hear your sweet words

Whispering tenderly in my ear

 

I once knew the light

Being close to you

Now while everyone sleeps

I'm awake in the darkest blue.

 

You are my ghost, living within me

In the silence of the mist

Lingering in my mind and heart

The only place where you now exist.

 

Playing this sad tune,

The harmonic sorrow of my heart

I wait, and play only for you

For death we do depart.

Reviews

[None]

Very vivid and I can feel the sorrow and pain. The night adds to the mystery and feeling....
"Playing a midnight serenade
In this starry moonlit night
So black as my heart
As it aches for you tonight"
This goes so wonderfully with the picture as well.
A haunting aura exists around and inside your great poem!

[Robert Luna]

I loved the feeling that this piece gave me. Feeling of seeing the inter works of a creative mind so to speak. The way you paint this scene in my mind's eye of a longing lost soul looking for peace from their own thoughts that haunt their very being. I can relate so perfectly to that feeling. I dare not sleep to deep to afraid of the things I might see. I guess I feel the pain on a personal level is why i love this so.


Great Job!!!!!!

[George Love]

Definitely one of your best works and one of my favorites as well. I like the odd rhyme, no-rhyme scheme in each verse. It makes this work veryw ell. Quite haunting, well written!

[Michael X]

The title really depicts this writing perfectly, "midnight serenade" moonlights haunting melody,
being expressed for one so desired, love the ambience created by melancholy force projected
with subtle ease, a gentle yet overshadowed tone being reflected by a lone symphany playing for
the soul ghost haunting the heart with desires through memory, the imagery flows through
with a bewitching charm, held spellbound by the night's shadow of darkness, rayne, you
take the reader to another time and place, where the sound of heartbeat linger in the mist,
the graphic was a nice touch, visual, imaginative, creative, and emotionally consistant, beautiful.

[Y.F.]

Argh, everything I wanted to say about this piece has already been said.
I agree with Therisa - The title is great and very fitting, and I also agree with Brenda Sue - the 4th stanza is my favorite.
Great rhyming and imagery, which emphasizes the great pain in this creation.
Great picture to back the descriptions in the poem.
Your skill never ceases to amaze me.

[Valentine]

This is about the best piece by you that I have read..great going ..I loved it..Even could feel the emotions displayed..God bless...Valentine

[THERISA]

The title is prefect for this poem, especially with the graphic that you used. Conveying a romantic and gothic feeling to the verses written. Of lovers, separated by death, yet linked into the hereafter by their shared loved. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.

Therisa

[poddar kushal]

it is musical and haunting. can you change one "night" in "In this starry moonlit night
So black as my heart
As it aches for you tonight"? but, still it is a great poem.

[Brenda Sue]

You are my ghost, living within me
In the silence of the mist
Lingering in my mind and heart
The only place where you now exist.

Wow, is the only word I can think of now. These words come from my ever being. So beautifully penned.

[Kim]

How hauntingly sad. Great imagery! I love the pictures you have to go with it as well.
you are my ghost, living within me
in the silence of the mist
lingering in my mind and heart
the only place where you now exist
This stanza says so much. In your mind and heart is a good place to be, for he is always close to you.
Great Write