Outcast

Something I wrote during my Easter day --- how i felt among my family.

A bleeding rose

Among this garden of flowers

So different among the rest

 

They stop and stare

But do they even notice

My heart pounds painfully in my chest

 

Like a little girl

Off in the distance

Alone and broken in her silhouette

 

She speaks to the demons

The only world she knows

Where society remains a threat

 

Faded silky dreams linger

A broken heart remains

Feels life fading fast

 

Like a ghost,

She stays in her shadows

Forever to remain – the outcast.

 

Reviews

[THERISA]

Reading this poem, i know the deep feelings that you're expressing to the reader. A stranger in a strange land, who is seen but not by those around her. You haven't done anything wrong, Rayne. I know these words may sound hollow right now to you. In this case, you'll have to trust me. Thank you for sharing this very personal poem with us.

Therisa

[deadlife]

It is sad. Very sad. And it is very beautifully written. There's no room for imagery..One can feel it straight..deep. Every line, right from the first one..is amazingly sad and true... I don't want to write much here..But to keep these feelings inside. I can't exactly say what's going inside me after reading this..yes but something is happening.
A favourite.
Thanks for sharing it dear.

[Y.F.]

Very sad and very beautiful.
I was really pissed at something when I logged in just now, and after reading your piece most of that anger just faded away, replaced with feelings of empathy and sorrow.
I really liked the rhyming scheme on this one.
Great job, and thank you for sharing this with us.

[Lee W. Deason]

I like the beat of it. A nice progressive float.
Good write.
�Lee�

[Brianna Brie]

Like a little girl
Off in the distance
Alone and broken in her silhouette

This sounds like something my best friend or sister-in-law would have written. Both are the middle child of their families. I suppose most families have an outcast so a lot of people can relate to your words. Superb.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Very powerful and sad... but you are not alone cause that's how i always feel when i am around family, I love them and all but still many times I feel different and I don't think that will ever change, thanks for speaking out for all us outcasts... brilliant work.

[Brenda Sue]

Very well written and so heartfelt. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[Damian Alan Gray]

God, don't I know it! You've just described my entire childhood in six stanzas. Always the freak, always the outcast; the one dressed in black misunderstanding. Yup, that was me. Thankfully, I grew up and found out that I wasn't as alone as I'd been made to feel. We are legion, we miscreants from the Island of Misfit Toys.
As always, you've outdone yourself with yet another deeply touching poem. I'd say "great work," but that would be redundant.

[Sarah]

Interesting. A very emotional poem that really tugs at your heart. You work very well with words. I especially like "Alone and broken in her silhouette" Beautiful imagery. And the title really goes well with it also so that's yet another plus. Great job once again.