Starry Night Of You
A Poem by
Beautifully Tragic xPoetry Queen
Gay & Lesbian
Thunderous roars
Of our hearts
Beating together
As one
An astronomical pleasure
Of existence
A love, forbidden in sin
Of us, bound together eternally
Light reflects
On your beautiful eyes,
Starry diamonds
Gazing into the universe
Kingdoms come,
Milky way screams
Tender kisses of passion
Within our souls
Exploring,
Deeply in your arms
And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you
© 2008 Beautifully Tragic xPoetry Queen
Author's Note
Different for me, any advice or suggestions are welcome.
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first and avobe all this is a work of wonder. i respect your analytical mind and the lyrical expressions it pens
("Beating together
As one" -there should be a puntuation or should the "an" be dropped in the next line.)
"And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you"-i like the way the night is personified in the last line. beautiful.
Posted 16 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
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i really liked it, but it seemed almost sad as if it was something ou wanted.
Posted 16 Years Ago
i really liked it, but it seemed almost sad as if it was something ou wanted.
Milky way screams
Tender kisses of passion
Within our souls
Exploring,
Deeply in your arms
And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you
This is so sinfully delicious! Very nice writing, very poetic! Very good flow and rhythm, balance is great! Very visual, too! A very tender and expressive write....
Posted 16 Years Ago
Milky way screams
Tender kisses of passion
Within our souls
Exploring,
Deeply in your arms
And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you
This is so sinfully delicious! Very nice writing, very poetic! Very good flow and rhythm, balance is great! Very visual, too! A very tender and expressive write....
Brilliant, and such a very romantic piece. Wonderful job!!!
Mikey
Posted 16 Years Ago
Brilliant, and such a very romantic piece. Wonderful job!!!
Mikey
Love knows no boundaries, as your poem so beautifully expresses it to the reader.Sadly, its people that made love, a sin. Thank you for sharing this passionate poem with us.
Therisa
Posted 16 Years Ago
Love knows no boundaries, as your poem so beautifully expresses it to the reader.Sadly, its people that made love, a sin. Thank you for sharing this passionate poem with us.
Therisa
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
first and avobe all this is a work of wonder. i respect your analytical mind and the lyrical expressions it pens
("Beating together
As one" -there should be a puntuation or should the "an" be dropped in the next line.)
"And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you"-i like the way the night is personified in the last line. beautiful.
Posted 16 Years Ago
first and avobe all this is a work of wonder. i respect your analytical mind and the lyrical expressions it pens
("Beating together
As one" -there should be a puntuation or should the "an" be dropped in the next line.)
"And sweet tender touch
In the starry night of you"-i like the way the night is personified in the last line. beautiful.
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
Very lyrical write. Maybe explore a few more works like these. This shows expansion and growth in you as a writer. Well done!
Posted 16 Years Ago
Very lyrical write. Maybe explore a few more works like these. This shows expansion and growth in you as a writer. Well done!
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
this is lyrical and you skilfully blended Van Gogh's twinkle from starry starry night in the passionate embrace of the lovers here wrestling as one - well done
my favourite of his pieces and what a Lover to uncover this in the bedroom of delight
Posted 16 Years Ago
this is lyrical and you skilfully blended Van Gogh's twinkle from starry starry night in the passionate embrace of the lovers here wrestling as one - well done
my favourite of his pieces and what a Lover to uncover this in the bedroom of delight
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
No advice to offer here and that's because it's wonderful as you've written it. This poem has a circular feel that is quite lovely - along with everything else. You really show a great deal of passion here, not to mention your word usage which kept to the theme of the sky without going overboard at all. Well done. My only suggestion...explore some more writing like this and see where it takes you.
Posted 16 Years Ago
No advice to offer here and that's because it's wonderful as you've written it. This poem has a circular feel that is quite lovely - along with everything else. You really show a great deal of passion here, not to mention your word usage which kept to the theme of the sky without going overboard at all. Well done. My only suggestion...explore some more writing like this and see where it takes you.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Thrilling; uplifting in its great imagery that comes through nicely.
Thank you for the send.
Forest
Posted 16 Years Ago
Thrilling; uplifting in its great imagery that comes through nicely.
Thank you for the send.
Forest
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
nice
Posted 16 Years Ago
nice
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
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My name is Rayne and I have been writing since high school. I took a long vacation from writing, and slowly starting to come back into it again. I admit that I am not the greatest writer, I'm just doi..
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