How Does It Feel

passing a feeling, i suppose.

How does it feel

When you've torn someone apart

Fragile and broken

With a severely broken heart

 

A lover,or a friend

Is all I ever wanted to be

Left beaten and used

Everything taken from me
 

Pride and joy

Has been stripped away

When all I ever needed

Was a friend who would stay

 

How does it feel?

Watching pain flow from these eyes

All my years, gone

Hiding behind this disguise

 

Just smile and wave

Be some pretty face

Beautifully tragic

A beautiful disgrace

 

How will it feel

When I'm dead and gone

All words turned to dust

As the wind carries them on

 

 

Reviews

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Great Job!...Thank you for entering it into my contest...I loved every word in this poem...I could see what was going to happen every time..Your imaginary sense is wonderful! Come check sum of my pieces out!
Yea its me, The one you Envy,
Mistress E (the Traigic Queen)

[Nicholas Hallows]

This is a really good poem. Very strong rhythm. I really liked the first stanza. Well written. NH

[mattavelli]

This is great, very strong emotion.
Have fun. :)

[E. M. Murren]

This piece fits your name quiet well... it is beautifully tragic. Such sadness expressed here exquisitely. The loss opens veins in the reader's mind. Well done.

[Rodwonder]

This would make a pretty good song... Just drop a chorus in there... Good rythm...

[SweetPeachesAlways]

Watching pain flow from these eyes...very poignant and touching...soulful and sad.
Good write of a painful subject...

[JC Fox]

Great imagery as always and I like how it is on the dark side it's just a pity that it reflects your pain because that is the sucky kind of pain when it's your own. But it's amusing when it is someone else's (especially when you hate them) not a helpful review though sorry

[THERISA]

Rayne, your words paint a picture of emotional pain that take forever to heal. A person, badly hurt trying to hide this fact from the world behind the facade they present. All the while, crying a river of mental tears. You will find that special one, someday. Have faith, Rayne.

Therisa