Enchanted World

An enchanted world

Where fools can be kings

A world filled with beauty

And magical things

 

Mystical dragons soar

Through a vast open sky

Hop on for a ride

Through the clouds you will fly

 

Knights on royal steeds

Brave as can be

Rescuing princesses

From ogres so mean

 

Fairies play freely

In a garden of flowers

A lavishly painted garden

To lie in for hours

 

Goddesses of the sea

Sitting on their rocks

Mermaids of beauty

With golden shiny locks

 

Such an enchanting world

Where fools can be kings

A world filled with beauty

And magical things

 

Just close your eyes

And drift off to sleep

To a world with no reason

To cry or weep

 

Reviews

[Emma]

Really like the simple imaginary with this. It includes all the things a little girl or boy would love, (and me.)

[Lydia Wegner]

I really liked the poem, but one stanza (?) doesn't sound right to me- but then again, what do I know?-

Knights on royal steeds

Brave as can be

Rescuing princesses

From ogres so mean


Still, superb poem. I like it. :]

[Chelsea Schermerhorn]

Wonderful! I love the concept you built into the poem. You have made it into the first cut of finalists in my Imagery Contest.

[ShanZ-Turn]

great write, well written, and it flows so well.. I truly loved this.... thank you for sharing it. I want to pick out a favorite line or verse but can't i like them all.... I could only find one thing that I would change

To cry or weep
I would change it to

To cry or to weep

and that is only me hunting for something not to like.. lol

[Brittany DeFranco]

fantasy is also one of my favorites! I love fantasy its one of the best things to think about to forget about ur troubles or the real world!

~Brittany

[Corey Lunare-]

ah the writer of fantasy....a wonder i , a writer of fantasy, do not comprehend. I love this poem in part becase it sounds like me daydreaming off in class ad dreaming of the world i created here. dragona nd swrds, unholy fire and hate. I love it and this poem is a reminder of that! great job my friend!

[Ralphy]

I like this little gem. The touch of fantasy and words that flow. Nice

[Not Afraid of Bruises]

I loved this poem - it holds so much emotion without ever stating an emotion, but if you wanted to pull it off as a performance piece, you would really need to have an awesome presnece on stage.

Really, I loved the piece, but so many people submitted some great Slam pieces, I don't think you will place in the contest. Still, thank you so much for sharing - it was great.

[Nic E]

I've always loved things that are enchanted and fanciful. Reminds of of one of my favorite films Lord of the Rings. Although fictional there is a truth- We know live in a time where a "fool" is our king. LOL. Great piece and I also loved the imagery.

[Brenda Sue]

I love the imagery of this piece. So creative and beautiful. This is so great. Wonderfully penned. Great job.