Heaven In A Gel

When did the pursuit of

Happiness

Become the pursuit of

Wealth?

You are on rocky ground

and the

Heaven in a Gel,

That you lather yourself with

Still has the obvious cons,

Just remember it is

Stupid/Idiotic

And you are,

AmazingSlashAwesome.

 

No one could lament more deeply

For this claustrophobic

Patronizing, paranoiac

Mess,

 

 

But,

If you're making mayhem

Anyway;

Spin me around,

Dance Dance,

Like a viennese waltz at

Hitler's birthday party.

(You two would get on well.)

 

I'm pulling my hair out,

Stressing over

Your 'tragedy'.

And I am utterly

Confused,

At this strange

Enemy.

 

I'll make all your

Dreams come

True,

(Spin me around)

Even the bad

Ones,

(Dance Dance)

And your hearts desires.

(Aren't worth anything any more)

 

The seagulls start

Their lunchtime search,

Their police line up,

Across the

Inner-City high-school football pitch.

The caretakers work

(Take Care!)

Is done,

And so is mine,

I think,

(As) I look down at you

And your mangled body

(In your Jack Wills T-shirt)

And commit the image to memory.

 

But I wasn't looking.

(At the bottle,

Just what was on my plate,

And now its all gone.)

And I got hit by a passing bus.

 

 

 

Reviews

[EMP]

i love you. :P firstly, i love you because of the title ;) it's WHAT I SAID :D and secondly, because i love this, it's amazing, it's like claire said with different stories and thoughts, but you just make them so clear as well and you can just picture every single word that you say and what goes on. i love it i really really do.

[Darien Thomas Bragg]

I was just skimming through contest entries and I'm so glad I came across this, it is written in a style that appeals to me so much, the truncated stop-start modern no-boundaries structure is fantastic, and the range of ideas presented in the piece is broad and intriguing. The second stanza is brilliant, and the final line is a powerful volta which lends a new feel to the entire piece.

This is a piece of moving, enigmatic, stylish genius.

[Cassidy Mask]

Whenever i read something you've written i feel like i could almost pick out all the different strands that are woven together to make the whole. There always seems to be so many different stories and thoughts wound together - i like it muchly :) xx