Sun on the Pavement

I'm sorry about the rain,

Is what I'd try to say,

I see my shadow

on the pavement,

And I see the girl I'd rather be.

Long legs, skinny waist

That's the girl I'd rather be.

 

A legacy drawn in sand

This is a mask of a real

Person.

Casting shadows

(people watching)

(Long legs, Skinny waist

That's the girl I'd rather be).

 

Her confidence out shines

All blond bimbo's

and drama freaks.

(Reality is nothing on

what she has on you).

Long legs, Skinny waist

The girl I'd rather be

(You know how these

Lines go).

 

We are all different shapes

(Different shadows).

Sometimes though

The sun plays tricks,

(Long legs skinny waist

That is the girl I'd rather be)

Makes us believe

We got long legs (Skinny waist)

then we go look in mirrors

(and break them).

 

You can't see her

Scars or Cracks,

Only her long legs and skinny waist

This the girl I would rather be

 

Sun on the Pavement

Dances with

the girl, I’ll never be.

 

 

 

 

Long legs

         

 

                Skinny Waist

 

Reviews

[~angelalala~]

i loved this poem. every girl has wished she was something/ somebody else. your description of this shadow person, you but you in a different light, is beautiful. i like the repitition of "long legs, skinny waist". this is something all girls can relate to, its something thrown in our faces by society, the perfect woman. "Sun on the Pavement Dances with the girl, i'll never be." brilliant ending. beautiful, brilliant poem.

[EMP]

i love it. i really really do, i just, i dunno, god. took my breath away. i love it... i really do, i dunno what else i can say...

[EliLies]

this is really good. you have insane potential, my friend.

[Poeticpiers]

a train of thought revealing probably more than you intend presented in free form prose but using repetion effectively.

[Eira Anchor]

Yeah, I really liked this one beth! It's one of my favourite one of yours