ANTICHRIST

For those who know my work, see I don't have to rhyme I just like tooooooo :~)

Fan the flames of my own internal hell
And from my very ashes shall arise
A black and twisted scar covered soul
Void of conscious responsibility to morals
Death liberated of human guilt's and virtues
Expelled into the fragile plane of man
Thrash in pain the torture of a diseased mind
To cringe in fear the touch of a pure thought
Bleed forth a shadow from the darkest heart
And glut from the feast of honest souls
Made corrupt by its foul presence
Vulnerable only the resurrection of flesh
And the sharp sword of good deeds
                    Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[M.Babu]

A look behind the mask - what will you find?
More than just a smile - evil behind?

Felt like this was a liberation of some sort - breaking from taboo, social morality - a step forward, leaving inhibition behind.
Dreadfully dark!
~M.Babu~

[Bear]

That is an interesting way of looking at it, I was thinking fallen angel when I wrote it but can see your point of view on a more human level of shaking off the shackles of his own restraint. Thank you for the thought-provoking review :~)

[Yurie Lee]

I can imagine this poem being about someone who has a darker mindset that can only be restored doing good. Kind of like a fallen angel trying to regain their wings, or something. Idk. That's the only thing I could think of off the top of my head.

Well done, my friend~

Ps: I haven't been on here for a while due to school and such, so I'm sorry I haven't really doing much~

[Bear]

Thank you and a fallen angel was who I had in mind when I wrote this so you are dead on :~)
I hope things at school are going well and no need to feel sorry education always comes first and will for the rest of your life. So good luck, good grades and good writing :~)

[Dalton Wagoner]

.........woah.........0_0

[Bear]

:~}.........

[Breanna Riddle]

This is great. I love it.

[Bear]

Thank you, I am glad you like it :~)

[andrew mitchell]

A power write Bear, the imagery spot on dark!! The format is just perfect with meter etc. Well done Bear.

[Bear]

Thank you but did you notice how bad my rhyme scheme was :~)

[andrew mitchell]

I read this as free verse lol just taken in by the power, It worked lol!

[Insight "MH"]

When I give my opinion of a writing for someone who I praise as a writer, I get lost for words. I really admire your work.

[Bear]

You're taking the time to read my work is praise enough for me my friend :~)

[Emily]

Lovely poem!
I really liked it!!

[Bear]

Thanks to you for a place I could post this one :~)

[Érenn]

Bear, might I just begin by stating I am already aware of the fact mentioned in the description ^^ After all I did read another poem from your already existing collection here, that follows the same tune. But that's immaterial compared to what I have to say next.

Your poem felt so smooth the meter, the rhythm and the structure that's maintained throughout the write is superb, not to mention the justice you have done to the picture on which most of your lines are based. I must say your words weave images which are quite stark, dark yet I couldn't help but immerse into this dark night. This definitely has a little Shakespearean feel to it and yet the words just roll off the mouth without any hitch, truly enjoyed it till the end. Also you do justice to the title. ^^Awesome poem ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

P.S. Never stop going for your rhymes sometimes though variations are not crimes ;)

[Bear]

Once Emily posted the dark poetry contest this poem came to mind right off. I don't normally send read request or do the contest but a lot of people ask if rhyme is all I do so this was my chance to let everyone see the answer to that question :~) Thank you for your great review my friend.