SOLDIERS OF HEAVEN

                     Picture by Mitch Zorich

On the wings of hope and prayer they fly in total bliss
These soldiers of heaven who in plain sight we miss
They mark the actions of all who walk this earthly plain
Good marks and to the gates of heaven one might obtain
So to are marked the cruel, crooks and killers in kind
But in a much harder and hotter place their end will find
To hide in plain sight with wings every color under the sun
They sacrifice all but honor, valor and duty, just to be one
From the sky they descend in a line of astral splendor
As we remain unaware the judgement on us they might render
Beauty unsurpassed they seem to have us under their spell
These soldiers who mark whether we will go to heaven or hell
Fly free heavens sentries, butterflies in armor of color and light
And pray they mark well the many things in life we've done right
                                            Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[Ronnie]

Aww, This is great, really great. I'm a bit sad i read part 2 first, that one made me high, this one added much more to it. now i can go back and continue writing my short story. amazing job, keep it up Bear.

[Bear]

It is my fault for not posted them linked together, I never even thought about till after I had posted the second poem, so forgive my negligence :~)

[Ronnie]

It's totally write. as long as i get high, i don't really care which part the first, You are forgiven dear Bear.

[McBear]

This was amazing! I loved the photo as well as how you wrote this. You work always has its own special touch c:

[Bear]

Thank you, this was part of a writing challenge and the poem was written specifically for this picture :~)

[McBear]

c: I loved it

[Urja Gokani]

its an amazing poem about soldier's its blissful and a beautiful analogy in case if you want to check out my poem which is related to this poem it's name is "the warrior's" amazingly written keep it up !!

[Bear]

Thank you for your kind words and I will gladly return the read and review favor soon :~)

[Carbon Muse]

Butterflies as angels is such a beautiful analogy. Not only that, but as a children's poem, it would make them stop and think whenever they see a butterfly, subliminally instilling the habit of periodically evaluating their lives and keeping them on the right path.

Your author's note is a priceless gift in itself as it has taught me a little more about the use and omission of punctuation in poems.

Thank you Bear, for sharing this beautiful piece.

[Bear]

Thank you for your kind words, I will gladly return the read and review favor soon :~)

[Kay]

Beautiful and thoughtful piece, and as always, I love your rhyme scheme. :)

[Bear]

Thank you, there is a second part of this poem I keep meaning to post I will have to get to soon.

[Dalton Wagoner]

Wow, Bear! This is GORGEOUS! This is my favorite piece of yours! I will gladly share this amongst my friends, with your permission of course.

[Bear]

You have my permission, there is a second part to this I haven't posted yet that I will see about digging it out.

[Dalton Wagoner]

Yay! I'm so excited!

[L. Michelle Corp]

Beautifully written, Bear. "And pray they mark well the many things in life we've done right" You have a way of saying what most people can't articulate, including myself.

[Bear]

You shouldn't flatter me so, you will give me a big head and it is already to big and if it gets any bigger I will have to hire someone to carry it for me. Ha! Ha! I am glad you are having a good time reading my poetry, entertaining is my goal :~)

[L. Michelle Corp]

Ok, ok... bear yourself, Bear, 'cause a scathing review is coming your way =P (which would be absurd)

[Bear]

I just posted a new poem if your interested http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/BearMage/1631923/

[Insight "MH"]

This is "holy" , and i love the flow.
What a fine write it is.

Insight.

[Bear]

Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it, it was written as part of a writing challenge with an old poetry group I had back in the 90's

[Connie]

very beautiful, I enjoyed it.

[Bear]

Thank you again, it is a pleasure having you travel the pages of my poetry :~)

[Connie]

your welcome, i enjoyed traveling

[Gee]

Nicely written Bear,enjoyed this piece

[Bear]

Thank you for stopping by and reviewing my work, I will return the read and review favor soon :~)