TREE AM I

Picture by Hilbrandt

Leaf and limb do I forever bind to thee
Bark and root confine you to the ground as a tree
These were the words to the witch's spell
The words that made my life a living hell
A lad was I when upon the witch I did stumble
A clumsy boy who did make her trip then tumble
And in her fury from her hands she let lightning bolts fly
So I could not avoid her curse and spell thought I did try
A flash of light with waves of heat and a spark of pain
Then only her laughter as she walked on down the lane
It was true my feet were stuck as if rooted to the ground
I was changing into a tree and there was no help to be found
To quick the change for me to even call out it seemed
Trapped forever with the panic on my face as I screamed
Year after year the seasons have come as life passed by
Till in the forest the oldest gnarled and twisted tree am I
Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[Érenn]

This time I carefully observed the picture before I went to read your poem. Already in my mind I thought of the tree in the picture cursed and old, the picture gave me an odd image of a face on the tree. And then as I read your poem, I couldn't believe how wonderfully this story is woven. Almost a Grimm Brother's tale, yet to be completed though. Have you written a continuation to this piece by any chance? Because if you have I would love to read that as well. This was such a good, yet melancholic write. I enjoyed it ^^ Thank you for sharing ^^

[Bear]

So now you see that all I do is turn the picture into words that tell's the pictures story, only in rhyme which is my personal style. I never really considered writing more but I have a challenging idea for you if your feeling up to it, how would you like to write what you think and feel the rest of this tale would go? It might be interesting to hear the rest of the story (hope I don't get sued for saying the lol) so what do you think?

[Érenn]

I really like it ^^ Yeah I am definitely up for the challenge. Once I am done with Act III I am going to for this one. Just curious though, should I also try to go for rhymes if possible. May take me a while but I would like to give it a try like that, I already came up with a lot of characters and a complete plot after I read this one. To me this poem felt like a prologue ^^ So yeah I wouldn't mind writing a story about this one. ^^

[Bear]

Make it your own, your style your creation :~) I have retired from the story writing business so poetry is all I write now, it is my hobby and escape and good friend if something I wrote inspires you feel free to build on it :~)

[Lyingwithlions]

Awesome! Enjoyed this peice and the style in which it was written. I have just started using less punctuation myself and find it quite rewarding.

[Bear]

Thank you, I am glad I was able to entertain you :~)

[Jane Taylor Hardy]

Enchanting dreamy write....thank you for sharing!

[Bear]

Thank you for taking the time you leave your thoughts, I am glad you enjoyed in :~)

[Urja Gokani]

wow good piece of writing amazingly written keep it up!!

[Bear]

Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it feel free to stop by anytime :~)

[Indra Neil]

a riveting write and a story well composed in form of a poem! excellent take on the picture prompt!
the rhyme is wonderful!! well done!

[Bear]

Thank you, the poem was a writing challenge to write a poem for this picture specifically. In fact many of the poems I have posted here were written for said challenges I just haven't bothered to post the pictures with many,

[pikachulover]

I would just say it, 'Amazing'! The reason- 'When you appreciate something, words start lacking'

[Bear]

Thank you for your kind words, I hope to return the review favor in a day or two :~)

[pikachulover]

Haha, that's the mann! :)

[Rainslover]

Really Good! Damn good! It has all the perfect elements fit in it! Poetic sense, Story, Rhythm, Vocabulary and Meaning Perfectly Sent! Most of all there's the poetic feel which I always look in a poem!

[Bear]

Thank you my poetic friend, I hope to entertain with my words :~)

[Gee]

Like the rhyming style and tale.Nicely done

[Bear]

You are most kind, I will return the favor and partake the pleasures of your poetry this very afternoon :~)

[hagi]

A poem needs to have two elements:
1) A story/message conveyed
2) A good rhythm (something that many miss on)
And your poem had both.

[Bear]

Thank you for your kind words and like with Marcus the your notice ended up in my spam folder in my email, sorry about that and I think I have that fixed so please forgive the length of time it took to respond.

[marcus]

Transformed to the tree, rooted forever!!
Cool poem!!

[Bear]

Sorry it took so long the thank you for stopping by and reading my work for some reason the message from writers cafe ended in my spam folder and I just cleaned it out and found the message, now I have to keep and eye out for others that might have ended up there.