LAST DAY OF EDEN

This poem was written as part of a challenge for this picture by Mitch Zorich

THE APPLE TREE by MITCH ZORICH




In the shade of wisdom's tree sat I and she
To the world anew were all things that be
She called me Adam and I called her Eve
How was I to know of me she would deceive
Sweet was the fruit from the forbidden tree
But bitter was the effect that it had on me
Now I know I stand naked before the world
And the nature of its impact is now unfurled
For it was then he made his presence known
Now that the seeds of wisdom have been sown
From the sky he looked down on our naked skin
And knew we had committed an unforgivable sin
Somber his face as out from Eden we were cast
While painful was my sight of Eden at the last
By the tree bathed in light, Eve in naked splendor
And the sky bound face of my God forever to remember
                             Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[Érenn]

Ok what happens when you click on a poem and you end up reading two? The Answer: Really awesome times with rhymes. First: Your poem is smooth, crisp and well written. For me this was even more enjoyable, because I do a lot of research on Myths and Legends. Your poem spoke eloquently of the temptation Eve gave into and how it hurt Adam and how they were banished. ^^
Second: Shadow Whysper's poem is great as well. A more reasoning tone could be felt when I read her poetry. ^^ It was an awesome read and both of you are amazing when it comes to rhymes and it complexity. ^^ Thank you for sharing (And boy do i love to snoop around) ^^

[Bear]

thank you for your comments, I really loved this picture from the first time and we used a number of pictures by this artist.

[ShadowWhysper]

Thank you Errenn, glad you enjoyed :-) The Poetry Circle was definitely fun, always great to see the same image from so many different sets of eyes.. ;-)

[Érenn]

Yeah it sure sounds fun ^^ I enjoyed what I end up reading here. Thank you so much for dropping by here it's nice to meet you Shadow. ^^

[ShadowWhysper]

I remember this picture! I even have the poem I wrote for it as well...

The Price We Pay

A woman covers her face in shame
Yet she cannot be held to blame
For in her innocence she did not know
Just how fast the seed would grow
A taste of knowledge, innocence lost
Being human has a cost

Now for knowledge, there is a thirst
Some may think that we’ve been cursed
Though knowledge is demanding
With it comes understanding
And in that understanding lies
A sight that goes beyond the eyes
For it is felt deep within
Empathy is not a sin

The price we pay for innocence lost
Is it not worth the cost?

© Shadow Whysper

[Bear]

Poetry Circle 1997 or 1998, yes those were good times :~)