THE FIRST TIME

The fall of innocence occurred with little resistance
In fact my clothing came off with her assistance
While I had planned it to take time, starting with the face
She had other plans and turned it into some kind of race
It came and went with a blur of unexplainable emotion
While she was just warming me up with some hand lotion
A groan escaped me as I convulsed in rapture and joy
My face reddened for she had yet her true skills to employ
Though I tried to beg her forgiveness she said no need
The first time is often like this, as my back she did knead
Just catch your breath and get dressed when you are able
And don't be ashamed, many fall asleep on the massage table
                                   Bear

Author's Note

I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility. I thank you for taking the time to read my work.

Reviews

[Indra Neil]

brilliant twist in the end! :)

[Bear]

Thank you kind sir, I tried to raise people's eyebrows with this one before I before I brought them down back to earth :~)

[Indra Neil]

u r welcome! :)

[justdandy]

When I started writing I though this was something else. And I was like "Woah, I didnt it was supposed to be about this." and then at the end I was like "Well... That escalated quickly."

[Bear]

I can't help that most people's mind is in the gutter :~)

[justdandy]

Noooo.... I actually really like it. I know what the poem meant. Its just that first it sound wrong. But I got the concept at the end...

[Bear]

I was just kidding you, I wrote it that way to make people think it was about the first time having sex just to twist things at the end:~)

[justdandy]

I hate you.... I really got confused

[Bear]

Ha! Ha! I would say I am sorry but that would be a lie, I like to give people a shock now and then :~)

[Tomoe Tellez]

Ha! At first I was like "What! this had no mature warning!" and the I was just laughing at the end. I love poems with a twist at the end, it changes the story completely. Another great write!

[Bear]

I am glad you enjoyed it, the closest thing I would have to being of an adult nature would be COLD SHRINKAGE but even it is only suggestive in how you think of it :~)

[Robert]

This was very creative and funny. Remembering the first time and turning it into a poem. This line I'm serious really made me laugh out loud when I got to the last word. Just so you know I always read poems out loud because a poem is suppose to have sound. Well this is the line:

"While she was just warming me up with some hand lotion"

This was mu laugh of the day, so glad I read this one.

[Bear]

Thank you, I use to host an on line poetry circle back in the mid-nineties where I would post a picture and everyone would write a poem about it. I was often challenged to write something humorous so if you liked this you should be sure to read my poems Cold Shrinkage, Training Bra and Richard Simmons they too (see I got the too right that time Ha! Ha!) should give you a good laugh as well :~)

[Robert]

I just read Richard Simmons....Cold Shrinkage. Hmmm I wonder what that means? I will check the others out as well.

[marcus]

Excellent!! I like this. Very funny!!

[V. W. Wilhelmina]

I like this very much! I love that you've taken such an intimate experience and shared it in a charming way. The rhyming makes it fun and smooth to read so your choice not to punctuate much was great!