At the Bottom of the Liquor Bottle

At the Bottom of the Liquor Bottle

A Poem by Dalton Wagoner

At the bottom of the Liquor Bottle
I saw I was out again
I am on my third bottle
And not a penny to my name
I was trying to get drunk enough
To alleviate my shame

At the bottom of the Liquor Bottle
I saw us
We walked hand-in-hand
We went in for the kiss
We frolicked and played
We were full of bliss

At the bottom of the Liquor Bottle
I saw us again
We were fighting and screaming
I made you cry
You threatened to leave me
I knew you wouldn't say goodbye

At the bottom of the Liquor Bottle
I saw myself
Damp like my face from the tears
And smelling of alcohol pure
It was dark like life without you
But I guess that's something I must inure

© 2017 Dalton Wagoner


Author's Note

Dalton Wagoner
Please tell me what you think. I was inspired by one of my favorite songs. I hope you enjoy it!

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Very straightforward message, told with poignant honesty. There's much power in your words, from what I have seen (altho not a drinker) any addiction could be told this way & it's a very sad story. It's a good foreshadow & symbolism to have the bottle being empty, as it represents his life and everything he loves falling away becuz of the addiction. Whenever in a relationship with an alcoholic, it's a 3-way situation & the bottle always gets the best of a person. I feel all that heavy hopelessness in your truthful words.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to review my work. I appreciate your kind and in-depth review :-)
This is a very sad poem I love this poem you have kind of a blues vibe off it blues music its always about the struggles of life and what life is like and the poem is formatted in the same anything blues songs at least that's what I think so I learned and humanities anyways this was easier said in my mind I'm not really good with this reviwing thing but this poem was really good so I had to try

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Thank you, I appreciate your feedback! And you did a great job of reviewing :-)
I've been dealing with my dad having problems with alcoholism my entire life, so it was interesting to hear it through the alcoholic's point of view. It was interesting to read a poem like this! What song is it based off?

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

This poem was based off of the song "Drink You Away" by Justin Timberlake.
i liked it, it wasn't to drawn out but it didn't just skip strait to the point most people i see writing like this get it wrong but it seems you didn't i would like to know the name of the song you were inspired by.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

The song I was inspired by is "Drink You Away" by Justin Timberlake.
Peace, it was truly heart felt... I felt the pain on each line read, also, you painted quite a visual. It was a heARTful write, very poetic

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

The same to you. You seem like a great person! ☺
Nailah Baniti

8 Years Ago

I AM, YOU too
Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Lol thanks
A story about a man who has accepted his fate, for he did write it by himself.
A story about a man trying to forget his pain by geting druk for he blame himself. But alchohol couldn't help, for the past events of his life started replaying "At the bottom of the liquour bottle"
This is a beautiful, the reader can easily picture the events happening. You've done a good job with the imagery. And the rhyme is great. Thumbs up.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Jerryyoung1z

8 Years Ago

Ment "This is a beautiful piece"
Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Thank you! I really appreciate the positive vibes! :-)
the poem is good and really meaningful good job Dalton Wagoner it's like a story you've said in this poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Arbish!!! :-)
Yep, That's about how the story goes. Great rhyming Dalton.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Dalton Wagoner

8 Years Ago

Thanks, Andronicus! You always give such positive feedback!

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Added on February 3, 2016
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Dalton Wagoner
Dalton Wagoner

Cullowhee, NC



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