Key to my Heart

Have I fallen out of love with thee
The one who once put the air I breathe in me.
Has he created a passion of hate?
Or is the way he treats me simply fate?
Heart broken or filled with love and care
Will I always be in despair?
Pretend or realism, what will be true?
I had it in me to start a new.
Denied and denied over at constant.
Pushed away left feeling iridescent.
Do I give up everything to live in misery
Or let him go with questionable bravery.
To love or let go is the question
No matter what, state of depression.
Lost in his love or lost without
How am I better with no doubt?
Who is he to take and promise
And in return not a solace.
Try to be his everything
But in the end really nothing.
Love is forevermore...
BUT
The strength in me is limited
Endurance can only stay so high
Patience of a saint about to break
The heart in me is at stake.

Reviews

[Mark]

This sounds like an answer to the question I posed back at "My Everything".
What a pleasure to see a young person do rhyming verse! It is somewhat out of fashion, because it is harder, and requires more thought and concentration; no worry, I won't go off on my rant here, just accept my gratitude!
There were a few instances where I felt your word selection might have been purely for the sake of the rhyme, though: "denied over at constant", "feeling iridescent", "better with no doubt". Also "a new" is one word. So, although it could use a little polishing, your meaning is clear: He is NOT in fact, your be-all and end-all--by the way, no man ever WILL be!--and if the question now becomes, "If I am to be miserable, would I be more miserable later, without him, or as I am, now, with him?" The answer is, NOW, as that is a situation you cannot fix; alone, you are the master of your own happiness, and can seek someone to share it with at your leisure!

[only hope]

Wow, that is amazing, i love the emotion that's been put into this piece. it's something i can relate to, good work, i hope to hear more from you soon :)

[shane]

brilliant =]

[A.M. Everlasting]

Thanks for your earlier review :) I very much liked this poem. You can feel the inner struggle, the constant back and forth that comes with indecision, then finally the recognition that one's own needs sometimes have to come first. You did excellently with the flow. I was a little taken aback by the lines "The strength in me is limited/Endurance can only stay so high" since they stopped your rhyme scheme. However, I had to do a double-take to even notice because you kept the rhythm going nicely. :) W

[Tiff-AH!-knee�]

wow. "the one who once put the air in me"
i love it :)