Slow Down Mister Clown!

Mister Clown is driving too fast and needs to slow down...

slow down, mister clown
you are driving too fast
you went through a light
at the junction just past

you look like you're doing
a hundred and three
slow down mister clown
and just listen to me

you seem in a hurry
you're making a dash
but unless you slow down
you are going to crash

wherever you're going
you can't be that late
whoever you're meeting
I'm sure that they'll wait

so don't go so fast
as you drive through the town
please listen to me and
SLOW DOWN MISTER CLOWN!!!

Reviews

[T]

I can see this in a childrens book easy. The languge is just right. All it needs is the pictures to go with it. Well done.

[Amit Parmessur]

You write well dear friend.
Far from the world of rejections, we are ready to help maximum people get published. We are a non-profit ezine called Golden Apple, with a few budding writers as editors.
I do suggest you submit your work to Golden Apple.
We are looking for and considering submissions right now. However, with Christmas and New Year approaching we are mostly welcoming submissions on these two events.
Here are some more words from us:

The second issue of Golden Apple has started accepting Submissions. It will be based solely on Christmas and definitely sounds very exciting! Our editors have already set themselves to work with the Submissions obtained.

We all aim at making this ezine a really nice and positive one!

Submissions (poems, short stories, sketches, song lyrics and any other) are most welcome. Read our GUIDELINES at

http://goldenappleezine.blogspot.com/2010/10/submissions.html


Have a look at Issue 1: http://goldenappleezine.blogspot.com/2010/10/golden-apple-issue-1-october-2010.html
Thank you!

[Lilly]

An endearing poem. Easy to read and very enjoyable

[Miss Coral]

This is super adorable. :)
Great write.. love the rhyme scheme and tone of it all. :)

-Coral-