The Spider and the Fly

When the spider met the fly...

The big and hairy spider
Saw the juicy little fly
And said "Fly down here beside me.
Don't be nervous. Don't be shy."

But the little fly was wary
And said "Surely it would be
That if i land down there beside you
You will eat me for your tea."

But the spider reassured him
With a warm and friendly smile
"Little friend i shall not harm you
We shall simply talk a while."

And the fly believed the spider
But then much to his dismay
He got caught upon the spider's web
And could not fly away.

"I'm so glad that you could visit me"
The hungry spider said
And then 'round fly she spun a coat
Of sticky silken thread.

"But you said you would not eat me!"
Her entangled victim cried
"I am sorry" grinned the spider
"I'm afraid that i have lied."

So if you are a little fly
Don't ever trust a spider
For if you do its sure that you
Will end your days inside her...

Reviews

[Tony]

Excellent.

[truth]

Brilliant thanks - I will treasure this one cheers.

[NSisifo]

Reminds me a great deal of The Spider and the Fly by Mary Howitt. This is a quicker read, but has the same morals. Great flow. Well done.

[.]

brilliant.

[*]

Excellent as usual Baz. Your words flow so effortlessly through every line. Loved the message and especially the last line.

[just rose.]

ah! the very basis of trust. i guess the message is to trust oneself.

the rhymes, as always, pitch-perfect; the dialogue, appropriately formal for a pair that have just met; and the word juicy in line two gives the reader a foreshadowing clue.

[Charles]

Isn't this an old old story, yet little flies always fall for the lie. Kind of like voters and politicians. The cute poem has a very nice flow and a meter which is seldom disrupted. There is also a nice, easy rhyming sequence. Many positive things to be said about this effort. :-)