CAN'T YOU BE MINE

English Song..damn special for me.. For "Her"..Whom I'm gonna remember thr most..

Title - "Can't You be Mine"

My dreams are of you

Which forced me to do

Thorns are saved for me 

But petals for you..

Can I be your shadow

Always walking beside

Can I be your heartbeat

Of your heart inside..

Cant u be mine..

Mere khwaabo me tu harr pal zinda hai..

Cant u be mine

Har lamha bas tu saansein leta hai..

I cant breathe alone

Coz, my breath is counting on you..

I cant sleep alone

Coz m thinkin about you night till dawn..

But now

I feel

The moments 

are just some memories..

But now 

I can see

You're leaving

Just like a shadow in the dark..

But I'm holding you girl

N I'm holdin you tight

No matter you ain't there 

Still kept close to my heart..

Yes I'll be your shadow

Always walking beside

Yes I'll be your heartbeat

of your heart inside..

Yes you'l be mine..

Mere khwaabo me tu harr pal zinda hai..

Yes you'll be mine

Har lamha bas tu saansein leta hai..

Yes you'l be mine.

Me dekhoon toh bas tera chehra hai..

Yes you'l be mine

Binn tere mera dil adhoora hai..

Thank You for readin..By Basu Gupta

Reviews

[raj24]

i am actually enjoying reading your work... they all are sweet and cute words for your lover.. but like always they tell a side of love which ended on a wrong note.. keep writing.. its nice reading them :)

Raj

[Basu Gupta]

Ended on a wrong note..?

[raj24]

But now
I feel
The moments
are just some memories..

But now
I can see
You're leaving
Just like a shadow in the dark..

thats what i meant....

[Basu Gupta]

Okay..actually she was leaving because of some genuine reasons..so I can't stop her for my personal greed ..that's what I conveyed..
thanks for reviewing n' I'm glad you're enjoying going through my work.

[Sophy Freebirds]

I really am glad to find a fellow indian writer here.. the longing here,gosh!! Touched me- mere khwabon me tu zinda he.Mirrors your resolution never to forget her. I liked the reference to the shadow- first the rhetorical question to be a shadow" meaning to be with her",secondly you've told her presence as a shodow in the dark"andhere mein toh parchayi bhi sath chod jati he.".Nice writing boy. :)

~Sophy

[Basu Gupta]

I'm just glad that you like it..
thanks for such an amazing review..yes I needed one like this..
thanks for stopping by Sophy..

[Sophy Freebirds]

The pleasure was all mine :)

[Katseye]

Not much to add very good write.

[Sami Khalil]

A lovely poem and song. Your heartbeats and music are that of love...:).......................

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks sami

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).........................

[Junert]

I love this, even the language I don't understand. It relates to me as well.

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You Junert

[Heromen Selena]

I like the bilingual aspect of this song. I could clearly tell it was a song even before I read the description. One thing to watch out for is word choice. You use "shadow" two different ways in this poem. The first time is meant to be loyal and dependable, while the second time its abandonment, and then the final time loyal and dependable again. You might want to change the second "shadow" just so it doesn't confuse the reader/listener. I love the emotion behind this song and hope that you continue to write music. Good job :)

[Basu Gupta]

You just stole my words..I mean you actually understood what I wanted from my audience..Thanks a lot for such an amazing review..n' yea I wil keep on manifesting the music inside me..
thanks again for stopping by n seeing my work

[Heromen Selena]

Oh well that's good :) no problem!

[KWP]

such lovely sentiment, even without understanding the other language ... oh it is the lucky girl to be kept in someone's heart x x

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks a lot for reviewing..glad you like it..

[Leslie Philibert]

Fine job, love the (Hindi?) quote at the end, would have preferred standard spelling ( you, can`t) though....

[Basu Gupta]

Yes sir..Actually I posted this in hurry via my phone..that's why slang..
Thanks for reviewing

[kublakhan27]

Lovely words...I liked the first stanza especially...well done :)

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks for stopping by..

[Ayushi]

Sweet and romantic.. You have very well expressed your cravings for her..
"Yes I'll be your shadow
Always walking beside
Yes I'll be your heartbeat
of your heart inside.."

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks ayushi..I just made an attempt..