TRAIL OF LIES

I was in the dark n shouting loud
when I hear your voice in a casual crowd
with a tongue of black
which truth just lack
with the floor just shook n' followed a crack..

I just tried to make my foot on way
All I need's some strength I dare to say
to bear such a dreadful night
to quench my thirst with a "SHINING DAY"

Shining day
yes I dare to say
I want a shining day
Can't I live my way..


I then watched you in the narrow street
With your head on his lap on a brownish seat
I just fell from the highest height
With anger being poured down through eyes..

Then I smashed my pitiable unrequited face
Coz, I didn't do wrong in our SHARED  case

Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel
Though she stole my heart with her glaring eyes
Still i don't want a trail of lies

I can live my life as a lonely one
With days like nights in-spite of sun
A body devoid of heart n' soul
But i can surely learn to crawl...

yes i can learn to crawl

yes i can learn to crawl

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Author's Note

my first song..
hope you all like it

Reviews

[Karen]

I would like to hear the song sung and played if it's a song. It seems like the words are pretty good. Way to go for your first song!

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Karen]

Oh, wow... thank you! I love the guitar! Thank you for putting these words to music and sharing them!

[Leslie Philibert]

I like this. I would prefer and not n and I´ll not i`ll, but I`m a out-of-touch old guy who has lost track of the way young people now speak. A good write from a young talent.

[Basu Gupta]

thanks sir....
I've uploaded a rough song for this
here's the link;-
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
visit it at your leisure

[Sami Khalil]

A sad but wonderful song...Bravo...............

[Basu Gupta]

THANKS.........

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)..................

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Sami Khalil]

:)............................

[Penny]

Very nicely written. One can surely relate to the story and the heartbreak. The last few lines are the best. Al the best for future.

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a lottttt penny..
glad you liked it

[Penny]

It had been my pleasure

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Penny]

My netpack is dying right now but i'll surely listen to the song in a couple of days when it will be renewed :-)

[Basu Gupta]

okay..all's good