TRAIL OF LIES

I was in the dark n shouting loud
when I hear your voice in a casual crowd
with a tongue of black
which truth just lack
with the floor just shook n' followed a crack..

I just tried to make my foot on way
All I need's some strength I dare to say
to bear such a dreadful night
to quench my thirst with a "SHINING DAY"

Shining day
yes I dare to say
I want a shining day
Can't I live my way..


I then watched you in the narrow street
With your head on his lap on a brownish seat
I just fell from the highest height
With anger being poured down through eyes..

Then I smashed my pitiable unrequited face
Coz, I didn't do wrong in our SHARED  case

Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel
Though she stole my heart with her glaring eyes
Still i don't want a trail of lies

I can live my life as a lonely one
With days like nights in-spite of sun
A body devoid of heart n' soul
But i can surely learn to crawl...

yes i can learn to crawl

yes i can learn to crawl

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Author's Note

my first song..
hope you all like it

Reviews

[Alisha Heistand]

Wow, I like it a lot. I kind of put a tune to it in my head as I started to read it, then I saw you made it a song. That is wonderful, a good piece

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[crystalandra]

Initially I did not think that this was a song. I thought it was a poem about hurt and betrayal. Nevertheless I thought this was very heartfelt and well written with imagery of heart break. Well done.

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Poetic Beauty]

Love isn't always returned as we hoped it would be. There are people out there who dont have good intentions but if you dont try you will never experience anything.

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Saddam]

I can live my life as a lonely one
With days like nights in-spite of sun
A body devoid of heart n' soul
But i can surely learn to crawl...
this is wonderful song my friend. sad but meaningful. thanks.

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[sivan]

nice. didnt think it was a song... be interesting to hear the beat... like this line Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Nikki Hughes]

Can't make sense of it at all.

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Rita L. Sev]

This does indeed read like a song, well constructed Basu. Personally, I would correct a few grammatical errors, but I see this as a write for your generation, and your writing is consistent and meaningful. Pen on!

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a tonn ma'am..
here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[topsyturvy]

I loved it and I like the rhythm as well. :)

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[wordman]

I believe this is in the top ten.
sounds like a good country song

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Calibaster]

I agree with Karen! I want to hear it now! Well done though, very well done! :) ;)

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it

[Calibaster]

Thanks! But I'll have to do it at home! (The School blocks everything!)

I'm excited.

[Basu Gupta]

all's good..i'm waiting for your feedback about it