TRAIL OF LIES

I was in the dark n shouting loud
when I hear your voice in a casual crowd
with a tongue of black
which truth just lack
with the floor just shook n' followed a crack..

I just tried to make my foot on way
All I need's some strength I dare to say
to bear such a dreadful night
to quench my thirst with a "SHINING DAY"

Shining day
yes I dare to say
I want a shining day
Can't I live my way..


I then watched you in the narrow street
With your head on his lap on a brownish seat
I just fell from the highest height
With anger being poured down through eyes..

Then I smashed my pitiable unrequited face
Coz, I didn't do wrong in our SHARED  case

Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel
Though she stole my heart with her glaring eyes
Still i don't want a trail of lies

I can live my life as a lonely one
With days like nights in-spite of sun
A body devoid of heart n' soul
But i can surely learn to crawl...

yes i can learn to crawl

yes i can learn to crawl

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..

Author's Note

my first song..
hope you all like it

Reviews

[Karina]

This is really great. I really enjoy reading your writing. You have an amazing gift!

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks a lottt..
I feel blessed when writers like you find my work good..

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Beautiful array of words!! Keep Writing & Sharing!!

Good Wishes!!

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks priyanka..

[Shaquana Adams]

Yes i'll crawl
even i'll fall
With betrayed soul
still i'll crawl..


Beautiful lyrics and imagery. Good work :)

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks shaquana

[Kiara Rose]

I really like this, it flows beautifully

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks Kiara..
Glad you liked it

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

great lyrics full of emotion hint of pain, it really took me in

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks abdul

[gabrielle]

Hi Basu! I came back to let you know that I checked on your song (Trail of Lies). Just as I imagined the beat is kind of heavy (there’s angst, sort of edgy) that went well with the message of this poem. You played well the guitar but the strumming was, I think, too loud and I could not really understand the lyrics. I truly like the rock beat but I noticed that the beat is sort of monotonous. From an ordinary listener like me, I would truly want to hear variations of melodies.

I listened also to your other song (Loser in Front of pride). Again, you played well the guitar. The rendition is quite unique. It is as if you’re having conversation with your listeners. If the purpose of the song is for the listener to focus on the message then you already achieve that purpose. Personally, I would prefer that after 30 seconds of speaking, the tune or beat would escalate just like in “Secret” by One Republic. But you are the artist in here, you do what you think is best for your craft. I could see that you have the potentials and maybe you are now even a member of a rock band. Keep improving your craft!

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a lot gabrielle for such an uplifting,encouraging n' inspiring review..i totally agree with you about the shortcomings and monotonous tunes..with my guitar..
Actually I've just uploaded a rough music for them..right now my whole day n' hours are revolving around the books..my exams are quite close so i'm a bit busy with my books..
But i assure you that in the beginning of very april i'll upload these tracks with proper music n' rectify all the shortcomings which you've felt..
Thanks a tonnnn for stopping by..

[gabrielle]

welcome. it's great to know that your education is your priority =)

[Basu Gupta]

I guess it would be for you too..
btw your review was very helpful..I'm trying n editing my song hope it will match your taste..

[gabrielle]

let me know when you're done editing it and i'll check it out. =) what may be good to someone may not be necessarily good to others. listen to your instinct. when you feel that you've done great then it is...

[Basu Gupta]

Yeah you are right..
thanks for the support
I'll let you know once my editing completes

[gabrielle]

"Now I just hate of being an optimistic fool
who crushed his dreams for a lady so cruel
Though she stole my heart with her glaring eyes
Still i don't want a trail of lies"---

It’s agonizing to realize that the person whom one bestowed his heart and soul had been all along leading him on. Discovery of one’s trail of lies may be painful but it’s a blessing in disguise to know it early on. i hope i could listen to the song as of now i could be imagine a heavy notes accompanying this piece.

[Basu Gupta]

i've kept my fingers crossed already..listen the song once,the time you're free..i just hope you'll like it the link is just given above..btw thanks a ton gabrielle for such a lovely review

[Tina Louise UK]

Great song...well penned :) x

[Basu Gupta]

thanks Tia..glad you enjoyed..

[Basu Gupta]

finally uploaded a rough song for this..
here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
listen to it n' lay down your feedback there..

[Cassie]

Shining day
yes I dare to say
I want a shining day
Can't I live my way..


and yes you can crawl, a shattered soul doesnt mean we are totally down, it means we are stronger than we think. Nice one here

[Basu Gupta]

here's the link
http://beyauneturnitei.blogspot.in/
I've uploaded a rough song for this..
hope you like it