With 'YOU'....

Fingers crossed..!!

With you I enjoy my suffocating mediocrity,
With you I love me and my impulsive stupidity..
With you I can resist those evil temptations,
With you I fail to reciprocate other's attention..

Maybe I'd be the one in an endless queue,
All of us waiting and wanting you
Some can even give you another heart,
Some can fly you through those beautiful stars....

I don't think I do afford that all
But I'm sure I'll always catch you fall
I even won't make you fly through stars
I fear if moon just keep you as one of his star..

Changes would be enormous when you'd be with me
Starting with the one I badly want you to see,
Right now my destiny is monitoring my life
With you I can write by my own with full rights..

Every page of that book will start with you
Ending with the line I'm still in love with you..
Middle part would be the things we have done,
Accompanying with carefree and frivolous fun..

So would you be mine in this life so small
So that I can enjoy even with it's challenging falls
I won't ever lie and make you cry
Please say 'yes' and atleast give me a try..

Written By - BASU GUPTA

Author's Note

everyone feels for their first crush,first love..they do not know why they feel special with them,why their tease and taunts are felt appreciation..and why their heart-beat increases even when they see their beloved initials somewhere....
Maybe this is called 'LoVe'..
I tried to figure and pen down some of the things for such..
Hope you all like it..

Reviews

[Diana]

The repetition of "with you" works nicely in this. A meaningful write.

[Anand Sehgal]

Every page of that book will start with you
Ending with the line I'm still in love with you..
Middle part would be the things we have done,
Accompanying with carefree and frivolous fun..

an awesome journey we talked about !

[MandaBear]

Great poem. Whoever you read this to would love it. =)

[Michael G. Smith]

I would recite this out loud to the one you love.

[Uday Kanungo]

Great lines there. Although, if you want to better it a bit., maybe you should exchange some words which sound sort of 'mechanical' and dont really fit the context. Otherwise, a good work.

[icelandicblue]

This is beautiful, you speak of all the emotional things you can give and the things you can do not of the material things but of things from the heart. It's a lovely poem.

[Lady B]

Fantastic poem smooth and well expressed

[Aarea]

Amazing poem! It totally explained a perfect crush to me. "I fear the moon would keep you as one of his stars," beautiful!!! Incredible writing, incredible feelings. Nice work!

[Twizzler]

I loved it! You express your yearning so well and with such open honesty.