With 'YOU'....

Fingers crossed..!!

With you I enjoy my suffocating mediocrity,
With you I love me and my impulsive stupidity..
With you I can resist those evil temptations,
With you I fail to reciprocate other's attention..

Maybe I'd be the one in an endless queue,
All of us waiting and wanting you
Some can even give you another heart,
Some can fly you through those beautiful stars....

I don't think I do afford that all
But I'm sure I'll always catch you fall
I even won't make you fly through stars
I fear if moon just keep you as one of his star..

Changes would be enormous when you'd be with me
Starting with the one I badly want you to see,
Right now my destiny is monitoring my life
With you I can write by my own with full rights..

Every page of that book will start with you
Ending with the line I'm still in love with you..
Middle part would be the things we have done,
Accompanying with carefree and frivolous fun..

So would you be mine in this life so small
So that I can enjoy even with it's challenging falls
I won't ever lie and make you cry
Please say 'yes' and atleast give me a try..

Written By - BASU GUPTA

Author's Note

everyone feels for their first crush,first love..they do not know why they feel special with them,why their tease and taunts are felt appreciation..and why their heart-beat increases even when they see their beloved initials somewhere....
Maybe this is called 'LoVe'..
I tried to figure and pen down some of the things for such..
Hope you all like it..

Reviews

[Tennessee]

Nice. That is a unique and appealing way to describe a first crush. Good work.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This is amazing, Basu. The intoxication of the first love or being in love is so magical. You did a wonderful job portraying this. xo Winter

[Pryde Foltz]

What engaging and heartfelt write, Basu. Really lovely.

[breanna felt]

This is so sweet and to most people so true. Beautiful writing!

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I think this is a well-intentioned poem within a divine purpose of proclamation. The English needs improvement in certain areas, but I understand the meaning all too clear. Love makes all imperfections seem perfect; and in loving, we always desire to be as beautiful as our loved one sees us. Rather than hinging your desire for improvement of self upon another, I would recommend improving yourself, to be whom you want to be for your own sake. Only then, can true love follow.

[Rita L. Sev]

I do like this, Basu - the idea that the one we love can make us OK with our own perceived shortcomings - yes, love can do that. Well penned!

[Dr. Wood ?]

you did a fine job....First love often brings out a rush of feelings

[Calibaster]

This is so true. I used to have a crush on a really stupid/perverted kid. I don't know why, I would always tell myself, 'What are you doing?! He's an idiot! He doesn't even like you, why do you like him?' I never could answer myself. … :) He moved away a while ago, and I thought I was finally over him, but then I saw him again, and … well, it started all over again. I kinda hated him but liked him at the same time, if that makes sense. :)
All in all, this is a great write, that captures love pretty darn well! ;) keep up the good work!

[Angel]

It almost sounds like a proposal of marriage...

[kublakhan27]

I wonder about those things as well. This is a gorgeous statement of devotion, and whoever it is addressed to should consider themselves very lucky. Nicely done :)