With 'YOU'....

Fingers crossed..!!

With you I enjoy my suffocating mediocrity,
With you I love me and my impulsive stupidity..
With you I can resist those evil temptations,
With you I fail to reciprocate other's attention..

Maybe I'd be the one in an endless queue,
All of us waiting and wanting you
Some can even give you another heart,
Some can fly you through those beautiful stars....

I don't think I do afford that all
But I'm sure I'll always catch you fall
I even won't make you fly through stars
I fear if moon just keep you as one of his star..

Changes would be enormous when you'd be with me
Starting with the one I badly want you to see,
Right now my destiny is monitoring my life
With you I can write by my own with full rights..

Every page of that book will start with you
Ending with the line I'm still in love with you..
Middle part would be the things we have done,
Accompanying with carefree and frivolous fun..

So would you be mine in this life so small
So that I can enjoy even with it's challenging falls
I won't ever lie and make you cry
Please say 'yes' and atleast give me a try..

Written By - BASU GUPTA

Author's Note

everyone feels for their first crush,first love..they do not know why they feel special with them,why their tease and taunts are felt appreciation..and why their heart-beat increases even when they see their beloved initials somewhere....
Maybe this is called 'LoVe'..
I tried to figure and pen down some of the things for such..
Hope you all like it..

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

this is a wonderful lyrical write. you expressed that longing so well.

[Basu Gupta]

Thank you..I appreciate your feedback

[Carolina Constante]

You are very talented!! What a great poem! I wish I could express my feelings like that

[Basu Gupta]

You can express..even better than me..
thanks for stopping by

[Carolina Constante]

your welcome :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is truly beautiful.Pleading with the one you love to give you a chance even though what you think you are is not enough :)

[Basu Gupta]

Thankew for such an overwhelming review..
thanks for visiting

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are very welcome Basu :)

[Bowers]

This is incredible, you truly are talented, I love the idea of the love, this relationship. the last line was powerful, "please say "yes" and atleast give me a try.."
almost a desperate plea, but ... I don't know, the emotion and creative heartfelt words you've used... definitely drew me in, I love every bit!
great piece!

[Basu Gupta]

That was really inspiring..
made me feel proud n egoistic heheh..
Jokes apart I'm just thankful forgetting such adorable reviews by you
thanks for visiting

[Bowers]

your are very welcome, I appreciate your sharing :D

[Jennie Baron]

How lovely and absolutely inspired! I was just surfing around and realized that I'd not read your work in a long time. I'm glad I came across this even though you posted it some time ago. Sometimes I'm a silly incurable romantic and this really moves me. Not soon to be forgotten.

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks a tonn jennie...
Glad you liked it
Thanks for stopping by

[MBUYISA]

keep powerful poems coming
very well penned and structured
thanks for sharing once again

[Basu Gupta]

Thank you mbuyisa

[Abdul Batin Osman Bey]

interesting take on love I like the untraditional way you express yourself

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You abdul

[topsyturvy]

Be brave and go for it like your poem :)

[WithLoveandLoss.]

Beautiful. I truly could feel the desperation and yearning of this piece, and the will posessed to fight for a love of such rarity. Loved this staza most...

"Every page of that book will start with you
Ending with the line I'm still in love with you..
Middle part would be the things we have done,
Accompanying with carefree and frivolous fun.."

[Basu Gupta]

thanks for reading...glad you liked it

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, young love....nothing quite like it. The openess and honesty, the feeling of invincibility, the innocence and the passion. Absolutely lovely. Lydi**

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a tonnnn ma'am