THE DAYS WITHOUT ME

fictitious write...hope you like it..!! Intro - fictitious write,the main character is an immortal soul of a dead body and the girl concerned is his beloved..

Finally my funeral was completed with flowers
Some days were passed with she crying night and day,
'Why can't she move on and live her life?
Why can't she just forget me and stay..'

I wish I can hold her hand
I wish I can wipe her tears
All I'm now is a helpless soul
Just waiting her to recover from fears..

My heart's still thumping at a furious speed
That I myself felt to cry and weep
I don't think I can bear this pain
All I want my loving baby to sleep...

Still she's crying and weeping so loud
Rage is in my eyes,I just want to end this in a while
Every human on this planet so wide
I want to shoot who did steal her smile....

But I'm just helpless and responsible too
For her pain and make her sad..,
I just wish God to take away my blood,
Just to pay the debts of her tears,so many,shed..

But I'm too lying in a restricted grave
Where my body is already eaten by insects and worm
I can't do anything at all
Just entitled to see her untill I'm completely gone....

Written By - Basu Gupta

Reviews

[ayesha gupta]

thats so unique type of imagination. i have thought about it earlier, all i get is "if i die, i wont have any feeling about pain or anyone missing me" . nice write.

[Basu Gupta]

Thanks ayesha..glad you liked it

[Indian Ink]

wow such an authentic piece of writing...shall I say that this is in perfect contrast to the poem 'Home they brought her warrior dead" ??...very nice...keep writing!!!

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You..

[piyaB]

very much touchy..... you have a good depth in topic. I liked it.

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You Piya..

[raj24]

your poems remind me of myself.. thats what i used to do.. write about my love for her.... actually i was smiling reading your poems.. a part of my heart in your words.. keep writing .. people enjoy being love.. take care of yourself too :)

Raj

[Basu Gupta]

Thank You..I feel very good when any of my piece forces someone to relate himself..

yaa that's the best review ine can genuinly get..thanks for stopping by and seeing my work

[Vidya Bacchus]

This was so very interesting.To see the perspective of someone who died and has to see the pain his loved ones are in.Excellent poem Basu.

[Jennie Baron]

This one hit close to home because I give a lot of thought to life after death and how those we loved in life stay with us. It's a theme in my fiction in which marriage is a bond that lasts beyond this life. Loved the imagery and the concept!

[Joyce S. Greene]

This is the first time I've read a poem in which the speaker is speaking, quite literally, from the grave. Interesting concept, Basu. Keep writing!

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That was very deep and beauty hailed within:) Awesome:)

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a lot sir..appreciation from you smothers me with proud..
Thanks for reviewing

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Your very welcome:)

[shaimenne]

you wrote such a heart touching poem!!!nice

[Basu Gupta]

thank you shaimenne.. glad you liked it

[Epipsychologist]

This was an interesting read. I like that your narrator feels sorry for her sorrow

[Basu Gupta]

thank you..