Loser Infront Of Pride

Whenever thought of you..
Just read your messages again
A thing stroke(s) my heart awhile
A sensation equatin my intense pain..

Waited for you a long
Witnessed that anxious side
Still never approached you myself
Just for my absurd pride....

That seriously makes me regret
What if, if I would?
My ego can't calm my heart
Then why not I should?

Answers came up without count
Lacking that straight-forward 'Yes' or 'No'
Outnumbered that favouring option
With my burning spirit got low.....

My mind's ultimatum brought out 'No'
So threw my cell aside
I wish your approach would be their
Coz, I'm a loser infront of my pride....

Written By- Basu Gupta

Reviews

[B-poet]

Swallowing your pride is definitely a hard thing to do if you're a prideful person. Yet you have to do it in order to grow into the person you truly want to be. Nice work. You've got the point across in your own unique way, you can edit this one and make a 2nd version if you like. A distinguished write & read. :)

[Basu Gupta]

thanks...that really means a lotttt to me..i'll try to correct the mistakes you felt..and won't disappoint you next time

[Rita L. Sev]

You convey a great meaning here, Basu. Some spelling and structure errors that interrupted clarity, but with a bit of editing this piece is quite good.

[Basu Gupta]

thank you ma'am...i'll try to rectify my repeating mistakes...thanks for reviewing i really appreciate

[Clara]

There were a few problems with the structure of sentences and ordering of words here, but I thought you conveyed your feelings very well.

Nice write, Basu. :)

[Basu Gupta]

i'll rectify my mistakes...and bring the best for you..
Thanks for reviewing..

[Clara]

You're welcome. Keep up the good work. :)

[Sami Khalil]

Splendid poem ...Pen on...:)

[Sami Khalil]

"Waited for you a long
Witnessed that anxious side
Still never approached you myself
Just for my absurd pride.... "
Wow. You have managed to capture the whole poem in few short lines that says it all...Well done...:)

[lee von cleef]

Sing it out, I'am a loser in front of my pride tooo.