A FULFILLED DESIRE

LOVE IS ADORABLE....

You always stood beside me
Sometimes holding my hand,sometimes there in my thoughts
Yet I remembered everything about you..
Without even the slightest memory lost..

Talked with you a lot
Wanted at night,wanted in day
Sleep is just felt a gap
'An evil need' I should say.....

But sometimes that too did heal my soul
When you were with me in my dreams..
7(seven) hours were increased to 9(nine)
Just to see you more in my realm....

Hate those moments when you got upset
Try to make you up,even pleaded on my knees
With an attempt to see that heart-melting smile
From your lips while you say 'cheese'.....

Though we're together for a couple of months
Yet sound of your steps makes me mad
Don't know why,but I run towards you
Even without a single second shed....

Reviews

[Renée]

as I read..it is as if I was sitting with a friend listening .. nicely done

[The dark story]

whoa!! stunning write!! so amazing that i'm just running out of a perfect word to appreciate it's beauty!! each and every line carries the essence of the true loving feeling and it flows so well and clearly!! i can just say that how true love sounds like...running like a mad boy(like you have said there).hhahahahah...but it actually sounds so sweet and cute! i should say the rhytm just takes me away with it's emotion till the very end!!

EXCELLENT JOB!!HATS OFF TO YOU!!

[Basu Gupta]

"ASTONISHED"
I never thought you like it this much..
I really appreciate your review..
thanks

[The dark story]

Lol. No need to be so astonihed. It is worth it.:)
N your most welcome!!

[Blissful Sin]

Very nice
-Bliss

[Eileenws]

Very interesting take. You do an excellent job of expressing yourself.
Eileen

[Basu Gupta]

thanks a lot Eileen...i really appreciate.....

[ROSALIND]

excellent thought provoking wonderful write

[Basu Gupta]

thankew...

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Great write, love the thoughts of love painted in this lovely piece. Thanks for sharing.

[Basu Gupta]

that really meant a lottt...thanks

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome :)

[blueholmes]

:) :) :) lots of smilesss!! oh, maybe there could be better than that 'an evil need' haha, but that was unusual. you have your way of describing words. great write of yours :) and yeah, i guess desires must be fulfilled..which can give greater joy. keep on writing !! :)

[Basu Gupta]

thank you.......

[Trigorin]

Not bad.I think some of your imagery is a little cliche, but your topic is good and you've handled it well. Keeps the reader interested. Personally, I wouldn't have ended with the ellipsis, but that's up to you. Well done.

[Basu Gupta]

thanq.....

[LadySoDivine]

This is so wonderful! I have never really read a poem that describes my relationship so much! I truly feel like my boyfriend wrote this because this is exactly what he says to me all the time, only in poetic form. Really a wonderful job! It's rare to see someone express their deepest and most vulnerable emotions so freely and so beautifully. :)

[Basu Gupta]

ohh thanks a lotttttttttt.....

[Just Kim]

this is really good, much enjoyed

[Basu Gupta]

thankew...