A SHROUD OF THOUGHTS

fingers crossed..

Can't get you out of my mind
Can't make myself free..
What should I suppose to do
because you're my leaves and I'm a tree....

I can't live without you
Can't imagine that even for a second,
Not frightened even of death
But yes between us you'll be second....

I even feel disheartened
and lonely in a large crowd
Though everyone is making me feel special
Yet my condition won't make me proud.....

Silent is me,silence is everywhere
With inner thoughts fiercing so loud
Death is only the thing felt amiable
Dreaming to cover myself  with a shroud....

Reviews

[Rhianne Ney]

Hmmm... this is pretty vague and mysterious and I don't know how to react to the lines.
Hmm... pardon me but the only thing I understood there is the leaves and the tree-their relationship, how the tree can't leave with its trees (:
Here, I get it now, good poem

~Keep writing~

[Basu Gupta]

thankss....and i really thank GOD too that he conveyed you what i wanted..hehehe..

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome and it's my pleasure reading this

[Gareth6d]

By far the best poem I have read on this site :D fantastic!

[Basu Gupta]

ohh..don't say this..but frankly speaking after reading your review 'I was like on the cloud nine..'
thanks a lott....

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

D:

This is the second poem I have read that your wrote and I have to get this out:

...you have TALENT.

Caps for emphasis.

I overall like your style of writing,

Easy to understand

Sets a tone

And ends awesome-ly

Awesome write :)

[Basu Gupta]

thank you katherine...your reviews are really inspiring..

[Katherine Enma Pineapple]

As are your poems, as are your poems :D you're welcome~

[Carolann Dowsett]

Beautifully romantic, with a sad undertone. Nicely written.

[Basu Gupta]

thank you ma'am..

[Carolann Dowsett]

Welcome.

[Baby Ricochet]

Reminds me of the beatles

[Lucy Morningstar &heart..]

nice!

[Basu Gupta]

thank you ..

[Debbie_Philly]

Really a sad piece.. :( I felt your pain... I like this !!

[Basu Gupta]

thank you ma'am..