Burning

Burning

A Poem by Brianna

A black coat is draped across a bony figure like loose skin. 
A scratchy chalkboard sound pours out of the shadow in the doorway 
In a beat of a drum a raspy voice utters the sentence "are you afraid?" 
Deep red eyes taunt your gaze. 
A scream tickles the edge of your tongue. 
But your lips become paralyzed, 
The smell of burning flesh rises in puffs of smoke. 
Warm heat falls to your feet. 
They begin to burn. 
A cage of fire ignites around you in a circle 
He’s laughing now, 
laughing in his raspy voice, his bones shaking. 
The fire floats across your face, 
climbs up your legs, 
tickles its way down your arm. 
You begin to burn. 

© 2014 Brianna


Author's Note

Brianna
Anything Helps (:
I never know what to tag these as
ahh
Anyways
Thanks for all feedback (:

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I became more fearful with each word I read! This is very much a scary little tease... you don't know what to expect - you captured that feeling you get when something is frightening you! That bit of tenseness, that confusion as to where do I go it this happens....what am I seeing.... or hearing or what will happen - all of these at the same time! Very effective boo! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Brianna - I couldnt help but think of the Jordanian pilot who was burned alive in a cage in February 2015. Life imitates art once more. Truly eerie.
I dont mean to scare you - its just - this hit me like a punch in the gut.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow! This is a completely different feel from your other pieces. This is dark and terrifying. It literally makes you frightened as you read it. You have talent, Brianna! Keep it up!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have read all your poem and I find this one to be the most interesting one. You have great potential in writing. It is very descriptive and that makes it easy to imagine the horror. Keep up the good works. Hope to see some of your more works

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dark and eerie. Enjoyed this piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this poem, it is certainly a fitting title, it flowed well and maintained the ever important air of mystery and abstract content. This poem could be taken literally, or metaphorically and that is what I like about poetry. Very nice job :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I want more! What happens after catching fire? Is this a dream? How did I get here? You have me intrigued I would love to see this extended or in prose. Fantastic!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I haven't read much poems of the horror genre but I would love to say that this one is pretty cool. One can almost imagine it happening at that very moment. Great work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I became more fearful with each word I read! This is very much a scary little tease... you don't know what to expect - you captured that feeling you get when something is frightening you! That bit of tenseness, that confusion as to where do I go it this happens....what am I seeing.... or hearing or what will happen - all of these at the same time! Very effective boo! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hello. This had very vivid imagery which I always enjoy, you should consider writing a story with descriptions like that, I think you would do well :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on September 24, 2014
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