Burning

A black coat is draped across a bony figure like loose skin. 

A scratchy chalkboard sound pours out of the shadow in the doorway 

In a beat of a drum a raspy voice utters the sentence "are you afraid?" 

Deep red eyes taunt your gaze. 

A scream tickles the edge of your tongue. 

But your lips become paralyzed, 

The smell of burning flesh rises in puffs of smoke. 

Warm heat falls to your feet. 

They begin to burn. 

A cage of fire ignites around you in a circle 

He’s laughing now, 

laughing in his raspy voice, his bones shaking. 

The fire floats across your face, 

climbs up your legs, 

tickles its way down your arm. 

You begin to burn. 

Author's Note

Anything Helps (:
I never know what to tag these as
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Anyways
Thanks for all feedback (:

Reviews

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I became more fearful with each word I read! This is very much a scary little tease... you don't know what to expect - you captured that feeling you get when something is frightening you! That bit of tenseness, that confusion as to where do I go it this happens....what am I seeing.... or hearing or what will happen - all of these at the same time! Very effective boo! :)

[ANTO]

Brianna - I couldnt help but think of the Jordanian pilot who was burned alive in a cage in February 2015. Life imitates art once more. Truly eerie.
I dont mean to scare you - its just - this hit me like a punch in the gut.

[Aarea]

Wow! This is a completely different feel from your other pieces. This is dark and terrifying. It literally makes you frightened as you read it. You have talent, Brianna! Keep it up!

[Terrence Chang]

I have read all your poem and I find this one to be the most interesting one. You have great potential in writing. It is very descriptive and that makes it easy to imagine the horror. Keep up the good works. Hope to see some of your more works

[Rob Santana]

Dark and eerie. Enjoyed this piece.

[Ryan Henderson]

I like this poem, it is certainly a fitting title, it flowed well and maintained the ever important air of mystery and abstract content. This poem could be taken literally, or metaphorically and that is what I like about poetry. Very nice job :)

[N.E. St. Andrew]

I want more! What happens after catching fire? Is this a dream? How did I get here? You have me intrigued I would love to see this extended or in prose. Fantastic!

[wordsofheart]

I haven't read much poems of the horror genre but I would love to say that this one is pretty cool. One can almost imagine it happening at that very moment. Great work!

[LA Waning]

Hello. This had very vivid imagery which I always enjoy, you should consider writing a story with descriptions like that, I think you would do well :)