Every second Dying

A poem I wrote 12/23/2014 about about taking life for granted. SHAME ON US.

"Every second Dying"

One determined, one makes it through,

23 chromosomes meet 23 chromosomes.

Now your a zygote starting to die,

if split in two, will be twins, oh my!

Now 38 weeks of dying, that's different,

the rest of the world now calls you an infant.

Soon you are born on a star they call Earth,

already dying, wait you mean it gets worse?

Now you're surrounded by other dying souls,

dying's so confusing, so many different roads.

Some will be nice, kind, sweet, and so loving,

others are evil, mean, pushing and shoving.

Dying is stressful, sure not easy work,

maybe that's why so many are jerks.

Dying and dying, every second, everyday,

everywhere we look people wilting away.

Constantly dying it's all so depressing,

people all scared, sad, some confessing.

Here is a concept I challenge and give,

just cause were dying, why not choose to live?

Dying is certain, not one will dare miss,

so live as your dying, go out in a bliss.

-BB 

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Author's Note

Sort of a dark truth poem, which ends with a challenge to be optimistic in life. Just as you all, I love to hear opinions, good or bad. Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[Georgiana]

I love that the theme of pessimism is portrayed throughout this poem until the very end when optimism is introduced. I did not expect it! This made the poem very enjoyable, love a good ending! I found the rhyming effective. Dark writing is somehow very appealing to me, I suppose because it always seems to be more honest- thank you for suggesting that I read this.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank You Georgiana

[Daisy]

great job choosing words...... wonderful poem with wonderful thoughts.... great job

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank You so much !

[Confuser]

Hey, it has a wonderful uplifting message and is very clever. I think it is wonderful. You are so right and we should all listen to your message; very relateable. Great job. Keep writing.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thanks you so much.

[Confuser]

Well done indeed. Y/W........Dale

[Vawn]

Amazing! Has a little bit of everything ( humor, sadness, hope, etc.) This is a really good poem. Makes you not want to waste any time and do something productive! I especially know the pain of a death ( Much like everyone else ) but this is an inspiring poem :)

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank you so much.

[h d e rushin]

At the funeral of a friend last Saturday morning the pastor said "In sure and certain hope
of the resurrection to eternal life, through our lord Jesus Christ, we commend the almighty
God our brother, and we commit his body to the ground, earth to earth, ashes to ashes,
dust to dust" Then, while looking straight at me, he said of an appointment that we will
not be late for.

certainly an eye opening poem my friend..well done. dana

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

WOW, I'm deeply sorry about the loss of your friend, the pastor was definitely right about that one, we surly wont be late. All the more reasons to "think" out our actions before acting, because while we may never be late. We sure do not want to show up early. My prayers are with you all.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

*surely not surly, oops

[Matching Socks]

Such a great message in this one B.
It's mind over matter I suppose, life deals us some tough ones but we get back up and push forward.
Having good friends and family can sometimes make a big difference too.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Yes a strong loving support group makes all the difference in the world. Thank you for being a part of my group.

[Matching Socks]

You're welcome. :)

[Terrence Chang]

Nice poem Mr. Brain. Especially the ending. You have to keep a challenging everyone. People with pessimistic mind never take the opportunity to show what are they capable of. Death is inevitable task that everyone must follow. Dont let your soul regret once the body cannot move. I have also seen your vids and they are really good

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank you so much, and I hope peace and happiness surround you in India.

[Terrence Chang]

Your welcome. And Merry Christmas and have wonderful new year

[A Ghost of Myself]

Hey, BB, I hope you had a good Christmas. This reminded me of two related pieces of creative expression, one, the Shakespearean adage/quote “The day we're born is the day we begin dying.” Two, Tim McGraw's song 'Live like you're dying.' Both hold a fundamental truth, much like your poem which claims, every moment spent dying, is a moment lost of living. I love the concept behind this, and I like many (I would think) would love to live by this motto, but living is indeed harder than dying. I hope you are blessed with this ability, and I, like others will continue to aspire to reach such heights.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank you so much, and I CHALLENGE you and hope you do LIVE life too!

[Rita L. Sev]

Strange, I don't find this to be dark at at, but very inspiring. Life is indeed a series of little deaths. The trick is knowing when to hold on and when to let go. Well done, BB.

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

So true, thank you!

[Satan]

Your heart tells you what is real, I can see that. Learn from the hard times. Avoid taking the steps that lead into them but be mindful that some will always be unavoidable. Continue to walk the path of optimism, let your darkness always inspire you to seek light ;)

[Don't just B, but B amazing!]

Thank You, very well said...SATAN. lol