Feeling it

Feeling it

A Poem by Franky
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It happened one night.

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When I saw you   I knew


 


You had that look  The look that said yes


 


We had only been friends  This now changed


 


My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded


 


You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright


 


I walked to you   You stood your space


 


You appeared unsure   My breathing was not


 


I sized you up   The momentum moved us


 


You stood in your area   The game was on


 


I touched your face   You didn't flinch


 


You looked up   I could hear your heart


 


You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips


 


We knew


© 2022 Franky


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I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

7 Months Ago

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading th.. read more



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So, I'm thinking you and your friend are more than friends now.
Always great, that moment when it all comes together and the sparks start flying in a good way.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There's always some risk of being turned down when it comes to new relationships and crushes. When it works out and the feelings are mutual, those feelings can't be beat. I can feel that in your words.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

I agree. Those feelings, when returned are amazing.
How lovely. It's the right time for me to come across this as it recently didn't work out for me with someone I considered a friend and I lost them entirely in the process. My Grandad always said that men and women can't be friends, as at least one of them will always want more at some stage. I've tested his theory but so far he has proven to be right!

I enjoyed this a lot, thank you.
Laura.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

I was close friends with a woman from 2009 to 2014. I cared for her very much ada friend. She was.. read more
Laura Kate

3 Years Ago

That's very sad. I wasn't friends with the person I mentioned for anywhere near as long, and it was .. read more
Franky

2 Years Ago

sad but true. I still think of her.
Friends that soon turn into so much more. This is sweet 😊


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

I like that too!! Thank you dear.
I always feel like love is much more awkward and tortuous. Maybe just for me. XD but this piece made me smile and flowed sweetly.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

You are kind for reading and giving a helpful review. Thank you! I'm not a good writer so I app.. read more
Beautiful poem presenting love and affection.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

Thanks man!
You can feel the tension and the risk taking - but taking them anyway and with a happy ending.

I like the style you used to tell this story, really helped to see it from both characters separate points of view, then the coming together in one view at end "we knew"

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much Helen. I'm thrilled you liked it. Have a great rest of the day.
Helen

3 Years Ago

You too Frankie : )
Relationships keep changing, taking new shape and color. This poem is very realistic and I loved how you wrote it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

You are sweet for reading and reviewing....I appreciate a lot.
Dhara_Ditzy Kat

3 Years Ago

My pleasure Frankie 😺
Frankie...how could you call yourself "average"? Sometimes I read a story/poem and enjoy it, but forget about it. I really felt Feeling It. I not only enjoyed it, but I know it's going to stay in my head for a long time. You have a way of "photographing" real emotions and feelings and it says a lot about you. I can openly say I'm not good at writing poetry, but I do know a flippin' good one when I read one. We'll done 😊

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A breathtaking moment when a friendship crosses into something more. Things were about to change and the reader feels the anticipation.
A landmark moment captured fantastically. I enjoyed this read very much.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

3 Years Ago

Thank you Divya.....you are very encouraging. I need that since I'm often thinking my writing is k.. read more
Ayvid N

3 Years Ago

On the contrary, you are a very convincing writer. Feelings conveyed perfectly! And you're welcome .. read more
Franky

3 Years Ago

Thank you my friend. You are very kind. Much needed!

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