Feeling it

It happened one night.

When I saw you   I knew

 

You had that look  The look that said yes

 

We had only been friends  This now changed

 

My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded

 

You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright

 

I walked to you   You stood your space

 

You appeared unsure   My breathing was not

 

I sized you up   The momentum moved us

 

You stood in your area   The game was on

 

I touched your face   You didn't flinch

 

You looked up   I could hear your heart

 

You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips

 

We knew

Reviews

[Lorelei1969]

I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

[Franky]

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading this. Very kind.

[Robert Haigh]

When it happens it happens. If one feels that way but the other doesn't, it can ruin a friendship. But if you feel sure it's for both of you, then why not? Like Lisa, I found the font a little distracting, but I could read it, so no great problem. The poem itself is fine. I enjoyed the read.

[Franky]

Is it the font color, or the font itself? I could change it easily.

[Robert Haigh]

I think it's the font itself. Although it is in bold type it looks slightly blurry to my eyes.

[Franky]

Any better?

[Robert Haigh]

I find this easier to read, personally. I wear spectacles and I think that makes a difference in that bright, heavy text can sometimes look slightly blurred. This font is nice and clear.

[Franky]

Thank you so much for your feedback.

[Lisasview]

Since i never heard back from you regarding my honest review I can only assume that I offended you... Which of course was not my intention...
If so I am sorry.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Franky]

I apologize. I am not offended. I'm curious though, Is the font distracting or the color of the print?

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Sorry for such a long delay in responding to you.
Just now saw that you responded to me... but I never got it...so weird... I should have received a message....Anyway, no the color is not distracting...
I just felt that you could have used a different font and perhaps made it a bit larger. I felt there was too much separation between your lines and that because you used no punctuation I also felt that although I liked the poem...using punctuation would have made your words more powerful.
Please let me know your thoughts,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Dilan Gray]

The images and feelings are so strong. Your writing is amazing.

[Franky]

thank you! you are too kind.

[Dilan Gray]

You're so welcome, I really enjoyed reading it.

[Franky]

I know that this encouragment from you is helping me to want to continue writing.
sometimes hurtful or thoughtless comments can make some want to quit. So thank you!!

[Dilan Gray]

I understand completely and you're welcome! I hope you continue writing because I want to keep reading.

[Aura]

The uncertainty between two friends, a friendship growing into something more, blossoming into a new relationship. You capture that intital awkwardness between two people, who have feelings for each other but who are unsure how to show it to the other person. In the end, they knew it was going to happen, the chemistry is there. Beautifully written!

[Franky]

You.nailed it. That's what I wanted to show. Thanks!!

[Aura]

My pleasure!

[Lisasview]

Although, I liked your words and definitely relate, I found it rather difficult to read because of the font you used and also because there is no punctuation...
I hope I have not offended you, and if so I am sorry...that is not my intention...
I just want to be 100% honest when leaving a review...especially if I really like the poem..
I feel this is important..
Just saying "Oh I love it" or " What a great poem" is not always good..
Lisa, now in Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

Some of us are more adept at reading nonverbal cues. In this case both parties are what we all term as 'made for each other.' Thanks for sharing.

[Franky]

Thanks so much Frederick. This is a wonderful review. I appreciate your thoughts.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

See? now the speaker in this poem found a friendship growing into something more.
I was a with a friend in college and we tried this...we were so alike....we thought....maybe we should...
the date ended without a goodnight kiss...we were laughing too hard....from embarrassment mostly.
then, we didn't speak to each other for a few months...we got over it...
she is the one who influenced me to start writing poetry.
I will always feel a special for her for that.
Your poem made me smile for many reasons.
thanks,
j.

[Franky]

Thank you for such a wonderful review and personal story. So sorry i just noticed this!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

So sweet, beautiful and dreamy! When you know it's right nothing else matters!

[Franky]

Thank you. You are kind to read and review. Have a great weekend.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

My pleasure! You have a great weekend too!

[KAREN]

A charming, sweet write and it is very beautiful!

[Unspoken poet]

This is amazing, I believe guys and girls can be just friends, I have a best friend that is a man.
we get along fine. awesome write

[Franky]

Thank you! Sorry I never noticed your wonderful review. I appreciate it so much.