Feeling it

Feeling it

A Poem by Franky
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It happened one night.

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When I saw you   I knew


 


You had that look  The look that said yes


 


We had only been friends  This now changed


 


My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded


 


You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright


 


I walked to you   You stood your space


 


You appeared unsure   My breathing was not


 


I sized you up   The momentum moved us


 


You stood in your area   The game was on


 


I touched your face   You didn't flinch


 


You looked up   I could hear your heart


 


You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips


 


We knew


© 2022 Franky


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I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Franky

8 Months Ago

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading th.. read more
GlendaK

1 Day Ago

Yes, it is a beautiful love story told in condensed form. The comments usually help me to write a re.. read more



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This is such a wonderful write, muchly enjoyed this

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

10 Months Ago

Awwwww. Thank you dear. You're kind. I appreciate your thoughts.
Writergurl

10 Months Ago

not a problem
Oh, how unique! The way you flip flop…. You, then her…. Her then you….. and at the end the “we”!
It is sweet, creative and playful! A lot like flirting itself.
I very much enjoyed reading

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

You are too kind. Thanks though. That's a great review.
Such wonderful lines that get your readers into the energy of the moment it all happened. I really really love it.... my favourite was....We knew!!!!

Well done from me dear Franky
:-)))

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

Thank you from my heart dear Silmara...sent.. I love your review!
Good momentum.............

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

You're a doll. Thank you from my heart.
light and ashes

1 Year Ago

Bless you, you are so welcome.
“I sized you up The momentum moved us”

Loved the ‘dance’ of your words and your protagonists. Young love sauntering, yes. Great brevity, intensity, rhythm, flow, choice of words. Lovely teasing nuances. Lovely write.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

Oh my.....thank you immensely! You're wonderful.
Beautiful poem. The title suits it so well. You have a way to put intensity into words. My kind of writing

Posted 1 Year Ago


Franky

1 Year Ago

Thank you for your kind and helpful encouragement. I appreciate you!
Ioana Mihai

1 Year Ago

Welcome, likewise :)
The game of love is fraught with dangers and doubt, but when it works out as it did in this poem, we want to leap tall buildings in a single bound. Slay dragons? Yeah, that too. Hopefully, there'll be no sorry end that makes us dive into a bottle.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

Thank you.Sam. I always appreciate your thoughts.
Ooh I felt this on a deep level. This made me feel like I was in that place again, I love it. ❤️

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

Thank you Elena. That's a wonderful comment and review.
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
Sounds like the connection
was made ..well penned
and nicely expressed poem
well conveyed

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

Thank you Fran. I appreciate that.
Lovely poem and the title fits it perfectly! Sometimes, someone's eyes can say it all. It is so great when the feeling is mutual. Nicely done! Temp

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

2 Years Ago

I am thrilled you liked it! Thank you so much. 💓
Temperance

2 Years Ago

You are welcome!

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Added on June 6, 2020
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