Feeling it

Feeling it

A Poem by Franky
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It happened one night.

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When I saw you   I knew


 


You had that look  The look that said yes


 


We had only been friends  This now changed


 


My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded


 


You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright


 


I walked to you   You stood your space


 


You appeared unsure   My breathing was not


 


I sized you up   The momentum moved us


 


You stood in your area   The game was on


 


I touched your face   You didn't flinch


 


You looked up   I could hear your heart


 


You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips


 


We knew


© 2022 Franky


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I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

8 Months Ago

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading th.. read more



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' We knew '
That's all it takes !

When the feeling is mutual, everything seems to fall into place.

This is so beautiful and romantic. : )
Your thoughts leave me in awe.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i always enjoy love stories with happy endings. never happened in real life, not for me. but i like these stories. there was one time i thought i'd broke through the friendzone, but that was a big miscalculation on my half. we're still friends though. yeah, but it was a cool piece that captured that one shot really vividly.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Week Ago

Thank you Ern. I really appreciate your thoughts and reading this too.
The layout, the brevity - of each part of the emotion or action, gently speeds the relationship onwards and forwards into that special time when.. 'we knew'. Is like positive turmoil gathering momentum already knowing its final destination! Fine poem and scrumptiously perfect seduction!

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Month Ago

Awesome review my friend. That makes me want to write more.
emmajoygreen

1 Month Ago

Just read it again.. it has reality all around it.
Franky

1 Month Ago

Thank you! It was fiction but I greatly
Appreciate that.
This is a really nice love poem. No need to over complicate things.
When you know, you know. You capture the moment perfectly, drawing your reader into the scene.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

6 Months Ago

Thank you Ana. You're very kind.
Papaya

6 Months Ago

You're welcome Franky. My pleasure 🙂
Many a sweet romance begins this way. What a lovely way to remember!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much. You're very kind.
What an amazing love story. One for this age of disconnection and loneliness we're living amongst. Beautiful!

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

6 Months Ago

Thank you kindly. I feel like this was just an attempt. I prefer to write short stories.
What a beautiful write,
it reminded me of something that once made me happy but now its just a memory,
keep writing.!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

8 Months Ago

Thank you! I appreciate that but I actually prefer writing short stories.
Amy R

8 Months Ago

You're welcome, that's nice,
hoping to read a few in time.
Franky

8 Months Ago

When you have time. I appreciate your nice review. Poetry is tough!
I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

8 Months Ago

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading th.. read more
This is such a wonderful write, muchly enjoyed this

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

10 Months Ago

Awwwww. Thank you dear. You're kind. I appreciate your thoughts.
Writergurl

10 Months Ago

not a problem
Oh, how unique! The way you flip flop…. You, then her…. Her then you….. and at the end the “we”!
It is sweet, creative and playful! A lot like flirting itself.
I very much enjoyed reading

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Franky

1 Year Ago

You are too kind. Thanks though. That's a great review.

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