Feeling it

It happened one night.

When I saw you   I knew

 

You had that look  The look that said yes

 

We had only been friends  This now changed

 

My mouth went dry   Your heart pounded

 

You smiled so sweet   My eyes so bright

 

I walked to you   You stood your space

 

You appeared unsure   My breathing was not

 

I sized you up   The momentum moved us

 

You stood in your area   The game was on

 

I touched your face   You didn't flinch

 

You looked up   I could hear your heart

 

You smiled sweetly   I kissed your lips

 

We knew

Reviews

[Lorelei1969]

I love the way love is portrayed in this poem; the differences in the reactions, the knowing, the start to finish. When you know, you know and I honestly believe in most situations we know! I was able to envision the looks, the expressions, the gestures. Even writing this review I can picture each face. Well done!

[Franky]

Oh my! Thank you! It was completely fiction but it flowed somehow. I appreciate you reading this. Very kind.

[emmajoygreen]

The layout, the brevity - of each part of the emotion or action, gently speeds the relationship onwards and forwards into that special time when.. 'we knew'. Is like positive turmoil gathering momentum already knowing its final destination! Fine poem and scrumptiously perfect seduction!

[Franky]

Awesome review my friend. That makes me want to write more.

[emmajoygreen]

Just read it again.. it has reality all around it.

[Franky]

Thank you! It was fiction but I greatly
Appreciate that.

[Papaya]

This is a really nice love poem. No need to over complicate things.
When you know, you know. You capture the moment perfectly, drawing your reader into the scene.

[Franky]

Thank you Ana. You're very kind.

[Papaya]

You're welcome Franky. My pleasure 🙂

[Mari' Emeraude]

Many a sweet romance begins this way. What a lovely way to remember!

[Franky]

Thank you so much. You're very kind.

[A Poor Player]

What an amazing love story. One for this age of disconnection and loneliness we're living amongst. Beautiful!

[Franky]

Thank you kindly. I feel like this was just an attempt. I prefer to write short stories.

[Amy R]

What a beautiful write,
it reminded me of something that once made me happy but now its just a memory,
keep writing.!

[Franky]

Thank you! I appreciate that but I actually prefer writing short stories.

[Amy R]

You're welcome, that's nice,
hoping to read a few in time.

[Franky]

When you have time. I appreciate your nice review. Poetry is tough!

[Writergurl]

This is such a wonderful write, muchly enjoyed this

[Franky]

Awwwww. Thank you dear. You're kind. I appreciate your thoughts.

[Writergurl]

not a problem

[fallon]

Oh, how unique! The way you flip flop…. You, then her…. Her then you….. and at the end the “we”!
It is sweet, creative and playful! A lot like flirting itself.
I very much enjoyed reading

[Franky]

You are too kind. Thanks though. That's a great review.

[Silmara McGarry]

Such wonderful lines that get your readers into the energy of the moment it all happened. I really really love it.... my favourite was....We knew!!!!

Well done from me dear Franky
:-)))

[Franky]

Thank you from my heart dear Silmara...sent.. I love your review!

[light and ashes]

Good momentum.............

[Franky]

You're a doll. Thank you from my heart.

[light and ashes]

Bless you, you are so welcome.