The inevitable

A man is finally able to express himself to his lady love.

Words! So many words! I was finally able to say

Nearly able to keep my emotions at bay

'What a relief!' I thought as my words flowed and flowed

I had gone to her private room Her humble abode

I feared her response Her reaction to my heart

But she stayed true to form. Such a sweetheart

Breathing and composure A constant battle

However, I charged ahead Pedal to the medal

I needed her to know Of my thoughts and feelings

Waiting any longer would have been oh so unappealing

You told me of your situation Very confusing

I confessed to you my own Not any less bemusing

Where do we go from here I asked so tenderly

You told me of our (limited) options Not wanting to hurt me

I left you right after My feelings now expressed

With all my romantic words You probably felt pressed

Sleep was difficult to get Later on that night

I so hoped you wanted me too, or that you just might

Our next steps are so unclear, not at all obvious

Although my emotions are spent Our future is still ambiguous

Our spending the next day together, was strange yet wonderful

You went back to being yourself How so very loveable

 

Reviews

[Rana]

Hi Franky,

Thanks for sharing this poem :) I enjoyed the rhyme scheme-- something I always tend to shy away from when writing my own poems. I think the short couplets matched the content of the poem very well, made it almost breathless like the narrator seems to be at his confession/ expression.
I do agree with Lisa though, perhaps the use of punctuation would make the lines stronger through a forced pause or moment to ponder.

- Kata

[Franky]

Thank you kata. I really appreciate you taking the time. I wrote this in 2005 when I was a stupid man! Lol

[Red Brick Keshner]

Sometimes the only way is to face the music. We all eventually do. This is pure bravery to see it through. Thanks for sharing. /Frederick.

[Franky]

Thank you, 😀

[lessa (kenzie)]

This is so wonderful, I love the story line behind it. So nicely written. Awesome write

[Franky]

Thank you! You are very kind.

[ErosNthanatos]

Being in the moment and the now

[Franky]

It was indeed I was so much in love......yikes!

[AYVID N]

Sometimes talking it out is a good thing to do. Telling it like it is saves us time and one doesn't have to keep guessing if the other person is aware of how we feel. It puts us at an advantage. And we deserve it. After going through all the trials that love brings us. I sensed a lot of caring in your words. As if the poet is really into the person and is being very patient and going through a lot of uncertainty and yet sticking to her.

[Franky]

You nailed it! How true.

[Just Kim]

Wow!! This is simply amazing, I really enjoyed this well written write

[Franky]

Thank you! You are too kind. I write this quite a few years ago.

[Franky]

I appreciate the encouragement. This site hasn't been as helpful or as encouraging over the past few years for some reason so thank you!

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Here's a lovely point in a relationship when its time for two people to realize how much they mean to each other or perhaps move and grow away from each other, which I feel is human too. I loved the way you narrated your thoughts and feelings!

[Franky]

Thank you! Yes, this relationship described here was at a crossroads....

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

You're welcome...😊

[Kaylor Mason]

Relationships are always complicated. Everyone wants normal; normal doesn't exist. That's what's so wonderful, I think. Very nice poem :)

[Franky]

You are very kind. 🙂

I'm glad you took the time.

[Audrey M.]

Wow, that person sounds like they were only concerned for themself? So no real love lost there, no? If that's the case I feel you on that. This was good, I'm glad i came upon it.

[Franky]

You nailed it. Unfortunately. But at it turned out im much better off thanks for your thoughts.

[barleygirl]

Not sure if you did this on purpose, but your "tense" changes about midway thru . . . first she is a she, then she becomes "you" . . . I'm not against tense-changes, I do them myself & this one feels like a natural transition in viewpoint for your storyline. I just wondered if you were aware of it. Sometimes we miss when we do stuff like that. I love the word "inevitable" which seems to drive your storyline . . . conveying that sense we often get where we know we're going to fall, even tho we try to dance around it. Your poem shows this "falling" in a fun & realistic way. I could see this guy talking to himself as he stood on the ledge (the first part, where she is a she) . . . then he's talking to her (when she becomes "you") & that tense change, to me, shows that this guy has just gone even deeper & so the outcome is all the more inevitable (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Franky]

Thank you! And I no, I didn't realize that. Wow. Lol

[likesgreeneggsandham]

You're truly a romantic. It's lovely to see the world through eyes not so jaded. Keep up the writing!

[Franky]

Thank you! That situation was a release, but it didn't work out. But I learned from it too.