That Moment in Time (May 13)

My 8th piece...in last 24 hours :)

Shall I move my fingers off?

The cautiaus frailness of your heart

There is nothing there but a barrier

 

It leaves me standing there

As I plead you for the last time

"Give me a chance dear, I ll change everything".

 

With an unlikely thud

You push me away, threaten me

Telling me, "I don't want this".

My stuttering returns, my trembling

For your merchant smile goodbye

Every memory of that moment

makes me fall in love with death.

 

The deception of my insecurities fled

Like the lies of biological warmth

My nerves fumble, my spirit rushes.

 

Your words, they savour my heart

blunt and sharp, cutting through my heart

The blood against my ears.

I turned to go,

Hoping that one day you will come back

Little did I knew

It would be the very last time.

Reviews

[gombeggar]

definitely needs an edit especially verb usage

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Prolific... I love the way that your heart sings in this piece. You write in a "stream of conciousness" flow with this one that is really quite gripping. There is darkness, but there is also a beauty here that is unmistakable. Nicely done.

[Aehr]

Aww this piece is so sad and heartbreaking. I can actually feel the longing and pain in the poet's words. Well penned.