She was Beautiful

Trying to change my style..using this direct speech here

She was beautiful

but I couldn't see the moon on her face.

Or the Summer's day of Shakespeare

But her smile seemed to be an omni-present bliss.

She was beautiful for the way she thought

The way she perceived the world

the sparkle in her eyes ,

the graceful heavenly voice . 

All heavens and hell, 

and the angels and fairies

She felt the god in the little things

Unaware of her own divine powers

She wasn't just beautiful 

for something as temporary as her looks

She was beautiful, deep down to her spirit.

I learnt to shine in her dazzle

And now I think I have lost myself

But maybe the light in her has faded indistinctly

Her familiar light might just fill me with the necessary breath.

She isn't just beautiful 

for something as temporary as her frame of mind

She is blessed with eternal beauty, deep down to her soul.

Reviews

[Aehr]

I love how much thought you put into your poems. :D Although I admit that I don't review as much, and I apologise for that. This one though, was beautiful. Poetry is emotion in its best form, and you've proved that here. I liked the different style you've used here. Amazing job.

Shelving it. :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanxx Rhea...i must admit too...i don't review that much either :p :D

[Aehr]

:D :D :D haha, glad at least both of us are honest ;)

[Blue Ivory]

Beautiful, thoughtful poem. Great description. I like your comparisons. Clever!

[Akshita]

very gracefull nd glorious poem...
luved certain words u used in the poem.....

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank u akshita :)

[Inda]

Very "up-in the air" if you get what i mean, i like it, but if you say you want to change your a style a bit, try grounding yourself a bit more, look more on the ground than the heavens and i think that's when you'll see a significant change in your overall style. Having said that i do like this piece and enjoy the direct approach you took, mixes well and adds dept to the longing that is expressed.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thank you Inda...Sure will try to do that

[Dayran]

I remember growing up as a young man and seeing the movie star Padmini on the silver screen. I think I fell in love with her. These days I can still recall the intensity of the passion. Your writings are certainly reminiscent of such a memory. Thank you.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

you're welcome :) and thank you for the review :)

[Ruth]

Gorgeous work...made me lose track of where I was lol Lovely! x

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Lol....Thank you :)