The Desire Of A Poem

I want to become the greatest of poems

forever praising your beauty

An Ode to our parallel infinity.

I want to become the humblest of your servants

and say forever..I love you

How long, until our last breath?

I want to be the air of your throat

to be molded into honeyed words

and the aura that breathes on your fragrance.

 

Dear friend, eye-witness to my pain?

I submit my liability as evidence

Of my longing for your heart.

 

What is exalted evidence

If not to become beloved

To share intimacy, both pure and true.

 

I want to become the humblest of your thoughts

As a morning that remembers you 

As the light that embraces you even in the infinite darkness.

Reviews

[patricia]

I don't like the first line of the third stanza, but all the rest of this is beautiful. great work.
sorry not been doing your read request. thought my account was broke but it turns out its my
laptop. doing this on a different computer and its working fine. bye for now. will catch up soon. 'trish.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

oh thank you..i knw why u didn't like tht line...sounds kindof odd...thank u fr d review.. see ya :)

[Clive D Costa]

marvelous

[Blue Ivory]

Flattery should be done like this! Great work!

[Dayran]

Love's longing ... speaking of its sincerity ... and looking forward to the day of consummation. So near yet so far away. Lovely.

[junaid altaf]

exquisite and jubiliant
and yes
flamboyant....
thats all i have in store!

[Loner]

Hi Balkaran ,
an awesome write so much so that every female will think
that this poem is written in her honor a real dream come
true for every woman/ girl because this piece of work shows
extreme depth of love and devotion for her and only her
( How lucky she must be ) * winking/ smiles )
A great treat to read for every member of this cafe....

[gombeggar]

I want to become the greatest of poems ...do mean 'poems' here or poets? cuz that can change some meaning here but not the whole piece...anyway certain that this is a very loving expression

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

So beautiful... These words are what every woman longs to hear from a man. The vulnerability and laying down of swords, as it were, at our feet. We want the knight in shining armor, but we also want the knight to take off that armor and speak to us as this poem speaks. I like the metaphor, and in reading, this is fabulous. Great tempo...I liked it.