I mourn thy absence

In the arpeggios of perception

In this world of my airy dreams

A concerto of light less arrays

I sigh for your departure

My spirit mourns for your absence 

While the other chunks of my soul , celebrate

In the false sense of enlightenment

Of the heart, in a world saturated of treasures.

 

My body aches for earthly pains

So that my verses will be nourished

I dream of the unfulfilled future

And yearn more than anything

And in the sweet everglade of my heart

lives a memory and an image

In blazing big-bangs of origins

where orions are redefined phrases.

I surrender to future desolations 

To salvage the eclipse of hope

And lie enslaved,confined in the debacle

glued to my early years of innocence.

Reviews

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a good youthful decpiction of the agonies of yearning

[stephen dillon]

GREAT

[InsanityWriter]

Lovely. :)

[Manpreet]

Beautiful and perfect word use. A nice piece with lot of feel in it.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks manpreet :)

[Alexa Tasch]

So sweet and sad! I love the lines like "To salvage the eclipse of hope"! Its very dramatic and the imagery is great. Great write!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks alexa :)

[Alexa Tasch]

You're welcome!

[NGenieL]

This poem is absolutely stunning. My favourite stanza is the first one, which is where I went "whoa..." and I'm a sucker for semantic fields of spirituality ;P nice one!

[patricia]

i especially liked the line ...in the sweet everglades of my heart.
the whole poem had a great feel to it. The mood was perfect and your word choices excellent. Enjoyed.

[Dayran]

Innocence renews our perceptions and brings new vision to our eyes.

[gombeggar]

capitalize your title

otherwise very well written...very well indeed