Glimpses of the breath we shared

I want to have a glimpse

of the spared mist of rain

and what the haze holds in itself

I want to see you among the clouds

at the places where my life met the blue.

Places between my misery,

and your rich comfort

Places where I die

and you take birth.

I shall be speculating my familiar emotions

under the dullness of February

As you will gradually flare the world

like a November sun,late in your youth.

You have your own theories of love

lucid and clear as water

you leave no allowances for my temporariness

As a seeker for truth, 

I  realize the truth of our shared breath

With my philosophical verses

The relative distance of our thoughts

Your soul yet to be magnetized by love

Time had its wings

We have been known to each other,

Yet I want to look back

With the honor of our secret messages,like codes

We will be the bridge of the pacific,the  stars 

Where your image will ripen in me like certainty

Up to the infinite dark, the absolute of nothingness

You blend me with the creations brilliance 

And I rise to calm your worries of  sugary complacency.

Reviews

[Manpreet]

Lovely imagery beautifully expressed with perfect word use.

[James William Dyer]

"under the dullness of February
As you will gradually flare the world
like a November sun,late in your youth." these spoke most powerfully to me

[InsanityWriter]

Positively lovely. ;) Excellent work!

[patricia]

A conversation between the karmic bodies and honouring us all with what such profound ideas can create. A little superior attitutude between the writer that is leaving and the one that is to come that i found presumptuous but maybe that is just my own relative connectiveness to the idea of the sugary complacent one. Loved it.

[Dayran]

That bridge of the Pacific at this time may have to start from Vietnam. Perhaps it ought to be postponed for later.

[gombeggar]

still haven't masterd titling yer work yet...

yer poem is well done with some very good wording

time 'has' its wings ...perhaps

[Alexa Tasch]

Very descriptive and so beautiful! The first stanza really drew me in and I loved it until the end!

[quinfinn]

very descriptive and wonderfully poetic...truly a lovely write!

[David Scott]

Did you share a breath here? Honestly this felt like a blowing wind overtop the subject or through them like they mattered less than your pholosphies.
I may be missing something...
Now the poetry was actually very stimulating to my thinking and I enjoyed that. I just wonder if that was your intent as the title spoke of something other than what I read.
Felt like, "I exhaled".