Together (My 100th piece!!)

My 100th piece on writerscafe :) Something that I wrote a few months ago...had to add some flavors to it.

In the precious years of my youth
I have written what I could write
I had no hope to see the sunrise
but I cherished the fading light.

And you said me to turn back
but I had came too far
I found you in the night reverie
cause you were just a silent star.

You thought of me as weird
thats because I hate goodbyes
I wasn't strong enough to see you go
So I bid farewell with misty eyes.

How ironic...it started with 'together'
and till eternity, we shall be together
Didn't I tell you my beloved
We are just made for each other.

But its time to halt my heart's avidity
I shall wait to subtend

from the places where you originated

and from the places where I end.

Reviews

[Manpreet]

nice poem!

[InsanityWriter]

This is amazing! I loved it. :) Great work.

[James William Dyer]

I like the last stanza the best, I like how it reads something of a riddle and can be interpreted a few ways. I want to hear more about that silent star, the poem makes me curious.

[patricia]

A hundred writes of congratulations and an interesting poem too. Liked the more spacious font. It didnt seem familiar to me compared to the other of your works. Enjoyed.

[G!o]

You've built the monument in color. Congratulations.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

congratulations on your 100th poem Balkan, written to your usual high standard and a pleasure to read

[Dayran]

A child believing in the myth of dragons will play with the intensity of heroes. But a father who cannot diminish the child's impulses will start believing that dragons do s**t. That moves a person beyond the borders of reality and will after sometime come to define a new reality. Strange the way reality and illusion trades places in our lives. This poem is for the frame bal.

[quinfinn]

it's not how many pieces you write...rather, how you write those pieces. this one is one of your best...last stanza clinches it entirely. well done!

[AWickedMoon]

A wonderful poem, the flow is great! :)

[gombeggar]

'And you said me to turn back' ---said 'to' me to turn

'but I had came too far' ---'come' too far ---needs some edits



avidity...subtend? i do enjoy throwing big words around fer fun, myself...but i think yer overdoing things