Thy solitude encompasses my presence

I was the fallen petal of autumn

A shy hue of artistic thoughts

I arose from the dead, smiling at the world as a admirer

Time had corroded my craft.

 

I had become the frail ice of the lake rectified

The look of deepness in the eyes of 

The decaying enlightenment of the understanding years

The faded summer touch of the spring.

 

That made love to your spirit, from the compelling universe

I was a gloom from the moon-lit pools of old souls

A chase for the curving stalk of hope

A verse of pacifying phrases of reverie.

I am now a blaze of  new expectation 

comfortable in the glory of my poverty

printing prosperous dreams in her misery

searching rainbows in the scattered clouds.

I cherish the magnetic spells of her charm

I withstand tragedies and regrets

I am the dazzled shadow of your mirror

Lurking in the corners of your absolute  solitude.

Reviews

[Manpreet]

An intellectual piece very well penned and beautifully structured!!!

[InsanityWriter]

Beautiful. :) I love your word choices and how everything flowed together. :) Perfect. (;

[patricia]

ooh transcending our loneliness and finding the pearls of solitude. Loved the italics. The journey you described can only come from one who has travelled the road. I just love the line 'I was a gloom from the moon-lit pools of old souls.
You are one of those Oaks that have grown strong in contrary winds. With such wisdom others can benefit from you. Encouraging and penned in exquisite form.

[Tai Ryens]

You've crafted this delicately and carefully; aware of each and every flaw to the point near perfection. In a way only I and few others would understand, or perhaps it is only a portrait thought of by me: this is filled to the b rim with emotions that the poem almost becomes . . . apathetic. Emotionless. And that is what makes me adore this more.

[AWickedMoon]

As always beautiful. :)

[MOON]

Delicate touching write.

[Horselvvr]

This is very nice and touching! I really like it :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx :)

[Dayran]

Our expressions of our experiences are significant for many reasons. But mostly it helps to affirm the fact that what happens in our lives are not simply a matter of good or bad only. To do that we first learn savvy, then empathy, manners, honesty and right after that we learn to say it for what it is. It begins with expressions. Nice write.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

ya it begins wid expressions and i hav been trying to express myself...thnx for the review

[Deron Alexis]

well done dude love the metaphors and comparisons very well captured these emotions are common but your poetry is original in your approach well said

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thnx :)

[I, Rene]

This is just truly beautiful in all ways, wonderful write.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx