Your perfection gives me nightmares

You are like a shining star

far from my planetary  stainlessness

separated by our geometric distance.

 

I cannot stand your fathomage

I am a blurred piece of art

I tremble under your frost.

The weight of holy breeze,

the coldness of seeing you

I want to plant your pilgrimage

inside my heart 

 

I want to keep you close,like a brocade

It’s the taste of you, opalescent winter-dawns

I am lured by your perfection

I’m dying like a mythical bird

on the verge of extinction

So unsatisfied talking with you

 

My periphery vibrates to your rhythm

seeking your engrossment

And to breathe under our tree of remembrance.

My dreams smolder my nights 

The days are distasteful 

as the last ash of my tears.

Reviews

[Manpreet]

Beautifully written piece! I wonder why it hasn't melted the heart of stone yet.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

all i afford is to smile on such a great review :)

[ChrisM]

Oh I love this poem! The images are powerful, the movement is free and takes my mind to fabulous imaginings, one after the other after the other ... what great talent!

[Alexa Tasch]

The imagery is wonderful!! Each stanza is enchanting, especially the last! Its so powerful! The intensity of emotion really makes this a great piece!!

[Tai Ryens]

The analogy was dreamworld-like, and I admired the concept of planets in orbit; longing to collide even if it would lead unto certain doom. I particularly like the last stanza; a perfect, wide interpretation of your concept.

[InsanityWriter]

Last stanza was my favorite. (; It was all very good though!! :D Nice job! (:

[gombeggar]

hmm...particularlylike the last stanza

[Dayran]

Its a devotion so intense that it may separate the heart from the mind and allow the heart an untangled devotion of true love unencumbered by the failure of the mind to understand.

[Deron Alexis]

very good comparisons per usual very well written once again it's been great to read from you

[Marie]

A love which brushes by but does not touch...

[AWickedMoon]

"as the last ash of my tears." Such a great line! Nice job! :)