Free me from your grace

I am a poverty stricken, 

burning for your hope and brambles!

Love was a virtual treasure 

that I once tasted in shadows.

You are an arc of restricted elegance

that alloyed me in a fire of confinement

Now am a bewildered bird

cutting my own wings.

Such is the pain in my eyes

I who can never see you across oceans

Drenched in anonymous sighs and moans

Suffocating my so called immortality.

Go away,live merrily forever

far from the warmth of my words

let my fairy tales be half alive

like our unsolved riddles.

Ruin me now from my dreams

the last wealth of my youth

I am true love's last smoldering chunk

See me turning to dust.

Go away my mangled angel

My heart doesn't beat for you now

Look into these eyes

I am not lying,

for the first time...

Reviews

[Felicity's Eve]

The last stanza is what really got me. Very, very well done. :)

Another incredible piece by you! I've always been able to feel so much emotion through your poetry. I really love that about reading your work :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks nora...always a pleasure to have you reviewing my poems... :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Your work is something I never tire of. I absolutely love it. The pleasure is all mine, really :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

oh thnk you soo much.... :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)

[Tex]

every stanza I read ... i thought... this is incredibly amazing. it just kept surprising me it was so good. I do a lot of reading on WC and this is a stand out piece.

I was so disappointed at your second to last line:

I am not lying,
for the first time...

do you mean to tell us that everything else you have ever done or said was a lie? I plead with you to change this line. It is all that stands between this piece and PERFECTION.

99/100

[Balkaran Sidhu]

well this was supposed be an ironical line....not lying for the first time....here meaning lying for the first time...i don't know whether I could have got that if I was a reader of this sort of line
Anyway thank you so much for this lovely review...every piece of review serves as a learning arc for me :)

[Tex]

I read the other reviews below, after I posted this... It looks like I am the only one who took this wrong.... so might be best to leave it as it is... Sorry for messing with your mind... this was my first review of the morning, maybe I should make sure I am wide awake before reviewing ;-)

Lovely piece.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

haha.......no problem :)

[rnuff]

WOW this is really amazing, I enjoyed this write,
love the ending stanza.

[Dr. Wood ?]

great poem my friend...Fantastic final verse

[Kaushik Mitra]

loved it...4th stanza fetters me!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks for the review mate... hope to see more of you here!

[quinfinn]

difficult to sever the ties that bind, and even with the realization that you are no longer beholden to a person you still allow that person to pierce the veneer of your reality. this is wonderfully penned.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanks quinn.....When things don't go right and you don't get what you truely deserve.. u just tend to feel that way,don't you?

[quinfinn]

truly!

[DIVYA]

I want to reach the stage of detachment so well described by you in the last para. Great writing from you!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

i d rather hope nobody reaches there...thnx for the review