The last piece of Humanity in me

A shot at a moral poem... :)

I have in me a silent altruism
a last piece of humanity
What resides somewhere in me,
Obliged with stillness and tenderness,
The light which from the holy lantern does shine.

That love and time might at last find
The lustre of my heart's transparency
A human life betwixt immortal ideas,
The mortal liabilities craving perfect conceptions.

My human ignorance does impede
My universal perception of faith and wherewithal
As my satanity overtakes my soul
I fade like a rainbow robbed of its colors.

I hope for a whisper from the almighty
So this aching heart could become potent with a fiery bliss
That shall enshrine itself to harmony
in every cell, of every kind.

Author's Note

Feedback much appreciated

Reviews

[Loner]

A great write showing lovely shades of pain and agony
awesome write to read .....

[Pradeep Nair]

As my satanity overtakes my soul
I fade like a rainbow robbed of its colors.

I have noticed a rainbow without colors in your earlier works too..
imagine the rainbows with colors... will bring in a lot of positivity around.
its a nice work here..

[Manpreet]

Beautifully expressed and a well written piece. One of my instant favorites.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx a lot manpreet

[patricia]

I especially liked the last stanza in this with all its existential yearnings and universal search to belong. Loved it.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

m glad u loved it..thanx

[Alexa Tasch]

This is well thought out and deep. The whole message was interesting and true. I quite enjoyed this!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx alexa

[Alexa Tasch]

You're welcome!

[Sanity]

Interesting poem, I love your use of both old and new english to convey what you want to say. Draws in the reader. I myself am also a fan of poems surronding inner struggle, and I thought you did an excelent job in represnting that idea in this piece. The power and desperation that leaks through your words served to paint quite an interesting picture within this poem. Nicely done

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank you so much

[Marie]

The spark within would seem to be your soul..it wavers with your motality, even as you will it to brightness...

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thnx for the review marie.... :) you're so right

[quinfinn]

overall, an excellent piece on man's inner struggle....well written and cleverly plotted out. "satanity" ...i like that....never even heard it before, but i like it!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thnx quinfinn

[Felicity's Eve]

I loved the simile in the 3rd stanza. ^^

The flow of your poems are just amazing.

Amazing job, as always. :)

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thanx nora :)

[Felicity's Eve]

:)