Sonnet 4: Wilt our love be as translucent sky?

My 4th Sonnet

Wilt our Love be as translucent sky? 

diffracting all the chromatic hopes and dreams

A preluding surface on what we shalt lie 

That stretches over what we seekth, in eternal schemes?

Could I credit the transcendent stargaze,

And drench my self in glory of revery 

Should be exalted from my mortal days 

Till throned by my divine wealth,a heart treasury.

But love so pure wilt borrow me happiness

Rather would I be free than so made bound

That pain I hath embossed by my noblesse

Thy Immanent presence shalt incur love profound.

A human heart to which my soul might flee

And dream to fly into the eternal space of love,with thee.

Author's Note

Pardon my Shakespearean English...there could be some errors in it..
Writing a sonnet is a tough job...its difficult to project your emotions rightly...you..kind of deviate from your theme sometimes..isn't it? much like a fast bowler in cricket,bowling with a new ball and getting the ball to swing but not being able to control his swing.

Reviews

[amarlaksh]

Amazing write. Great Skill!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx amar