Sonnet 3: How Beautiful is the Damsel I love?

My third sonnet :)

How beautiful is the Damsel I love?

Majestic than the full moon night

thou beauty attained from the wild blue yonder above

whence the god seeketh all his divine light.

Those luscious words that echo from thy lips

Thy smile like a ambrosial  spring day

That my heart and solitudinarian soul sips

All reverted from my very own fay

But thy Internal beauty more adorable,buckled with angelic grace

Embroidered all with leaves of myrtle.

So celestial that I can't stop to praise

thy soul must be attired with sacred kirtle.

As thou would canonize me like a Deity

So I shalt love thee till eternity.

Reviews

[Miss Alicia]

This is wonderful. It is so beautifully put.

[Sakshi]

Superb! indeed the beauty a sonnet should have-the elegance which makes a sonnet-the element of grace - this has it all.
Very well done!!!

[Deron Alexis]

wow Tudor English well done very well done XD

[Manpreet]

Vow! i like this one.

[patricia]

This was exceptionally good. Great style and voice. Loved it.

[Divine Pen]

This is beautiful Balkaran...excellent archaic right...I wonder how lucky is the girl/woman you described in ur poem...keep writing

[Balkaran Sidhu]

Thanx :)

[James William Dyer]

I love sonnetts. This was fun to read, though in my personal opinion archaic speech like thou and whilst and words like that seem to b suffer the true emotions of a poem. Since the archaic language was intentional, though, I liked it, in the way u can appreciate the beauty of an antique craft item. Nice work

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx james

[Marie]

THis is so beautiful. Your portrayal is exquisite; you have giventhis woman attributes a human being can hardly hope to achieve.

I believe thepronoun in your third line should read "thy" instead of thou. Also you should not use contractions with this archaic English.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

I ll try to sort it out...thnx

[quinfinn]

methinks thou art enamoured with yon object of thine affection. you are improving immensely your tact and syntax in these sonnett type writes, carry on with this genre, it feels you. i really liked this!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thnx quinfinn...i m glad u liked it

[Felicity's Eve]

This is amazing! As always. ^^

But I have to wonder.... is this about anyone special to you...?

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx.....
yes ofcourse :)

[Felicity's Eve]

Thought so ^^