My Poem

Poetry about poetry .....

A Poem of my life

the silent words

whispering to the paper.

 

The intended things are

not easily penned

The intended offerings

still stuck in the periphery of the mind.

 

A million half-thoughts

some divine,some satanic

some pure ,some clear

A cold flame smoldering.

 

The verse hiding in my fingers

some unfulfilled dreams of my heart

like stanzas left on the brink

an artistic blend of hope.

A holy set of syntax

Stern in lilacis,opened up

and left among barest of sentences.

The words of self introversion

speaking to my consciousness

sparking a new thought

another verse growing.

Like a cursed poet

I write about pain and sorrows

my own contemporary art. 

More to go in the words within

Swirling about the themes

Vortex varying velocity viciously

Consciously attempting to make scenic of linguistics.

In a situation beyond language

Breaking the spell

Embracing all possible muses

Acting like the skies.

Falling softly into my own words

Under a perspective of a new

Covering myself with my entire chroma

Illuminating who I am.

Author's Note

This is a free flowing verse....something about poetry itself...
I would certainly like to know how the title sounds..

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think "MY Poem" is good..or maybe something like "Bemused by the Muse"

would fit too.

we all have our own battles with the written word...getting it from mind to paper...and poets, for some reason, thrive on pain..

that seems to be the rule...much easier to write about pain than it is to write happy stuff...it just flows more naturally...seems.

i really like the variety of your work and certain wording...

"a holy set of syntax/ stern in lilacs/opened up/ and left among barest of sentences"

so nice

jacob

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thank u very much sir

[Manpreet]

I feel the title limits the wide span of what you have expressed through this poem yet it is matching perfectly because life is also a great poem!! great write Balkaran!!!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thnx again :)

[G!o]

This is really modeled with a witty mind and i find it really interesting and lovely. You've put so much of all that circulates in a poet's mind. And i adore your sentence structure too. Lovely writing Balkaran...

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx man...!!

[Marie]

THis encompasses so much that simply "My Poem," doesn't seem to cover it all. I would sugggest something like "Poem of Who I Am."

[Balkaran Sidhu]

now i feel like being selfish....wasn't i?....must have taken that into account....nyway thanx for the review

[Balkaran Sidhu]

this is my weakness actually....not being able to title my poems justifiably....need to work on it

[SHEEMA HUQ]

all kinds of disturbed elements of the author's persona explored here, the themes are really not about process i think but about tackling the depth of the content of self discovery, quite an unusual poem I felt.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx

[quinfinn]

this is awesome in it's entirety. i love the alliteration in the 8th verse, wish you had made that a common theme throughout, i think it would give this poem electricity, however , i wont detract from the overall write, which is superb. love this!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

m glad u loved it...thanx

[Felicity's Eve]

I personally love the title and this was amazing! :)

The flow of the words, the message... everything was perfect.

Just how awesome are you?!

[Balkaran Sidhu]

:) m happy to know that somebody thinks me to be an awesome poet....pleasure...don't know yet ..how awesome I am :p :D !

[Balkaran Sidhu]

nyway thanx

[Felicity's Eve]

Well, you are very awesome! :)

[patricia]

you captured this well, that search that poets make to bring out intensity and depth - I especially liked the way you incorporated both the dark and light sides of the mind. Enjoyed.

[Balkaran Sidhu]

thanx... :)