Dream Or Destiny

Written for ten word contest

The girl is dreamer she builds castles in her dream

On a CLOUDY night, a scary dream let her scream

A specter wearing silk SKIRT looked sad and lazy

It was on a wooden BRIDGE her eyes looked crazy

 

The girl looked at the specter, it returned a sad smile

The specter started its tale pausing once in a while

While alive, she had many TANGIBLE assets to yield 

One was a big LIME mine and the other a big field 

 

Her manager was a SEEDY swindler and was full of vile

He took her for SKIING when snow was heavily pouring

When their bodies started freezing, he started drinking

She too wanted some drink to GENERATE inner heat 

He got her drunk and then wanted a lubricious treat

But she did not RECIPROCATE his lecherous tone 

His lewd lust ventured an act none can CONDONE

Her ruptured soul in fractured body wailed alone

Blood seeped through her fragmented clothes

Pain and anger seethed from her soul's sores

No aid came her way, slowly her life drifted away

Rich or poor single girls are vulnerable anyway

 

The specter ended her tragic tale.

She said, “Don’t trust every male 

And never ever let your mind  so dense

Look at things and get back your good sense.”

The dreamer asked herself, was it a dream of fear

Or a premonition about her future to come near

She too is single and an owner of mines and fields

Trusting all and living life carelessly without shields.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Manu]

Again, a beautiful writing from you :-)
The ending was quite intriguing as well as little bit scary. I felt like I was watching a movie with an open ending question and end. I am glad that it was just a dream, but what if it was going to be her destiny is something really haunting.
Very interesting use of those 10 words.
I loved it. Keep up this good writing :)

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An interesting piece of writing with a hidden moral message for womankind contained within.

While I am not a fan of these ten word contests, you have managed to meet all the criteria and use these words in a very profound setting.

Your piece is very descriptive, nicely worded and concludes with a very interesting premise...a dream or premonition? One for the reader to think about.

Nicely written work, Bala. Well done.

[Bala Gorthi]

Unfortunately I get hear a lot of crime against women in our country, Doodley. Some of them are heart wrenching to hear.
Sometimes the premonition kind of thing happens in life, though for a very short time leaving a faint memory of it. I am glad you gave taken note my last verses.
Thank you, Doodley, for your visit and appreciation.

[Surya]

As humans we have to trust each other, but I now a days seen some as trust worthy not all, and as females they have to be very careful in trusting others....
All in all ten words worked well, I enjoyed...:)

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and and sharing your thoughts, Surya.

[Wicahpi]

Hi Bala Gorthi, thank you for entering the 10 Words I Give contest. Beautifully crafted. Each given word is placed nicely within the tale. I like this style of poetry you've created. Nice analogies and rhyme. Nicely done!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and reviewing. Your contests are challenging. I really am enjoying writing for the ten word contests you create.
Keep visiting.

[Wicahpi]

Thank you. I'm glad you enjoy them!

[T.S. Sky]

Young ladies and old can make mistakes as this. It is always good to keep a good head about yourself when alone with a male. Brilliant write.

[Bala Gorthi]

I agree. Thank you for visiting and appreciating this write.

[T.S. Sky]

You're welcome.

[Lydia Shutter]

Unfortunately, in the world in which we live, we can not blindly trust everyone we meet. We must be wary...especially if we are walking alone in a deserted area. Quite the scary encounter you speak of here. Well written. Lydi**

[Bala Gorthi]

This was written for a ten word contest. Such things do happen to girls..times are changing but these crimes still continue.
Thank you for visiting and appreciating..