Broken Bricks

A saga of broken heart

She fondly cherished every inch of it
Treasured those sweet memories every bit
That love, fights, miseries and joys they lived
Precious pearls of memories their ocean shelved

A cyclone of treachery nourished by the selfish
Shattered the pieces of kindred bond to blemish
Jewels of bonds burgled by their motives so petty
Her heart suffered a mighty pain yelling for their pity

The helpless soul watching her kin in a war of greed
Grabbing alluring mundane vanities spoiling the creed
Gathering shattered pieces of heart, so ruthlessly shelled
The poor soul soulfully mourned the loss and her eyes welled

She can never get her sweet home back
It's kind of irremediable agonizing shock

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is an intense & compelling message becuz you write with image-packed word choices and action-packed verbs. I've read a billion end-of-love poems here & yours is very unique & original. I love the way you make this into a palpable whole, the complete story of what end-of-love can mean. It's so much more encompassing than having a broken heart. You've shown us here how a love failure can disrupt everything in a family's lives, with far-reaching difficult results. So well written! (((HUGS)))

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Margie, for visiting and appreciating. I am glad you have read this one. You rightly brought out the whole message in your review. May God give very strong hearts to those who go through such a phase.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"She can never get her sweet home back
It's kind of irremediable agonizing shock"

This is a heart touching write.
Sometimes, memories are what we hold on to even though the trust is broken..
Good work 👍

[Bala Gorthi]

It is not easy to erase the memories Yumnakay, especially those connected with our home and childhood.
Your visit and words both are appreciated.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I completely agree.
You're welcome! It was a pleasure reading your work 😊

[Diamond]

Very heart wrenching....The deepest of the relationships often face the worst of the circumstances. Its the way of God to prove their love to the rest of the world...I think.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you for visiting and sharing your view

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and sad situation described.
"The helpless soul watching her kin in a war of greed
Grabbing alluring mundane vanities spoiling the creed
Gathering shattered pieces of heart, so ruthlessly shelled
The poor soul soulfully mourned the loss and her eyes welled"
The above lines make us know. Life can be very hard and very scary. Thank you Bala for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you so much for your visit and appreciation, Coyote.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[Lydia Shutter]

Once trust is gone, the house of love tumbles and can not be rebuilt. Families are often torn apart due to treachery and selfishness. It's horribly sad. Memories remain and often they are rosy, but reality reflects the truth. Powerful poetry. Lydi**

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you so much for this appreciation, Lydia :-)

[Aishwarya Prem]

Well structured poem..had a nice read :)

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Aishwarya, for visiting and appreciating.

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A lovely metaphorical write on the aches of a damaged and irreparable relationship.

Some lovely vocabulary and imagery used throughout to illustrate the depths of sorrow and heart ache. Like many people have written before: the heart is a home. And to have it burgled and bludgeoned is a soul shattering experience.

A well written piece, Bala. Broken bricks can always be repaired, and the heart will consolidate and beat once again. Nice work.

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Doodley, for your visit and the appreciation.
You are right, the heart is a home and some people's hearts are delicate. This write is of the delicate heart. And surely some kind and comforting words and deeds can nurse and heal a badly broken heart.
Thank you for your support and encouragement.

[mercy party]

home can still be a state of mind. There can be reconciliation. This was a truly warm poem and i must say it felt brave. good!

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Mercy party, for your visit and words. You are right. The reconciliation can heal the wounded heart.

[Shabeeh Haider]

Selfishness and greed breaks at the foundation of a home.
People who are meant to be each others strength end up weakening the other.
The result is a broken heart and a broken family.
Very well expressed.

[Bala Gorthi]

Very rightly said Sir. The result is broken a heart and a broken family. Thank you for your precious visit and words. Keep visiting...

[Manu]

I loved every bit of this lovely heart wrenching saga of a broken heart, B :-). You are my idol when it comes to this kind of poetry. Very sublime and this one speaks to you evoking a reaction from readers .
I can feel the essence of this write. When trust gets broken by the ones whom we love and respect a lot...it breaks our roots...home- this word is one of the beautiful words that we have...A home without family is just a structure made of bricks. Lovely title- broken bricks..signifying a broken family.
As always very very good.
Brilliant :-) :-)

[Bala Gorthi]

Thank you Manu, for this uplifting review.
Home is the most beautiful and comforting word in this world. As family grows bonds weaken and walls rise within the wall as well as heart. Seeing the bonds weaken and break is most painful thing for selfless loving people.
Thank you for your continuous support. Keep visiting.