Those at the top - whose sons never seem to end up at frontlines would be slower to start or to prolong suffering if it came home to roost.
The poet feels the pain of humanity in the face of injustice which prohibits us all from reaching our potential.
I read today that the 8 richest people in the world have more money than half of the entire world's poor. :/
Well written piece Bala.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
I appreciate your visit and kind words, Tony.
I agree with what you said.
This is indeed an eye-opener write-up for those so buried in hatred and wars that they seem to have forgotten that every bloodshed on earth is a loss for which they will have to pay...
Good work!
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7 Years Ago
Thank you YumnaKay, for visiting and appreciating. Let us do our part Yumnakay, praying and penning .. read moreThank you YumnaKay, for visiting and appreciating. Let us do our part Yumnakay, praying and penning a few words and waiting for the peace and peaceful exchanges..
A powerful and worthwhile read.
" How come these pathetic saline tearful feasts
Not shaken merchants of crime and ruthless beasts?
Hey, predators and monsters don’t you have fears?"
I believe in karma. Predators and monsters will pay one day. Thank you Bala for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote
Don’t you think all are yours?
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Sir, for your precious visit and appreciation..
A very nice poem conveying about the lop sided behaviour of the societies. I honestly loved this sincerely written tale of tears.
Great tales are always written in simple language and this does that. Keep it up.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Michael, for visiting and appreciating this write..
As Asante mentioned, your writing is still quite raw; the ideas are excellent and with more experience the flow of structure and rhyme and choice of words will improve enormously.
Your theme is an important one; this poets tears for her country and people and her reactions to being a part of a world that is slowly spinning towards madness.
Your writing is improving all the time. And this is reflected in the increasing number of reads you are getting. Nicely done, Bala. Keep up the good work.
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Doodley for reading and appreciating my piece. I completely agree with you that this poem .. read moreThank you Doodley for reading and appreciating my piece. I completely agree with you that this poem especially is very raw because my emotions were like that. And I wanted to bring them as they were.
Surely, you would see my next poem in a brand new light. Thank you for your ever inspiring and very kind reviews :-) :-) Keep motivating me.
Your writing is very raw, but what it does for me is it puts our world in an interesting perspective that I wholeheartedly agree with. The destruction around us for the sake of power trips is upsetting, but what you do with your pen, shedding light on the topics that other poets tend to stray from occasionally, is admirable. Keep up what you do, Bala. I definitely enjoy your work shared here. x
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you, Asante, for those kind words of appreciation. I am glad that you enjoy my work..
We see the state of humanity disintegrating in the quest for power. When all is destroyed, what will be its purpose. Your poem emphasises the futility of never ending conflict that becomes the excuse for retribution. Is this why we were "created".?
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7 Years Ago
Sir, these days, right from the childhood the focus is on IQ , achievements and success. The EQ and .. read moreSir, these days, right from the childhood the focus is on IQ , achievements and success. The EQ and Other quotients are not developed. Strategies and marketing techniques are adopted even in family and personal relations.Now celebration means parties, loud music and rubbing cake ( icing/cream) on faces. When man turns too much outward the humanity is bound to disintegrate..
This is a passing phase and the lowest fall. Definitely things will change for the better. Till then, we have to witness keeping ourselves cool and strong.
Thank you for visiting and sharing.
This poem reflects so much of what I've been feeling these days about the way our world is full of strife, violence, & hatred. The best part is the way you make a connection using the idea of "saline" -- a natural part of us, the majority of what we're made of -- & the way it combines thru tears & blood, both markers of all these tragedies. I confess I've been having ideas of such monsters being "eliminated" in our world, rather than praying for their redemption! Your poem conveys a similar outrage toward the perpetrators. Important message! (((HUGS)))
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7 Years Ago
Thank you,Margie, for visiting and sharing... I strongly feel that all the beings(including animals.. read moreThank you,Margie, for visiting and sharing... I strongly feel that all the beings(including animals and plants ) are similar in certain aspects.The water, heat, air, life and the ether these are present in varying proportions in all the beings.even plants respond to us us when we start communicating with them.
The saline part of humans and animals is associated with emotions and feelings. I feel the connect is there.. This write came as reaction to some events. Tears are unique. They run down and bring something down.. They relieve us. We feel light. We owe tears a lot..
I am not very happy with the way things are happening around. Injustice boils my blood. The hype about everything and all the madness seems meaningless to me. Sometimes even reading and writing doesn't help in bringing peace.. Thank you for sharing your thoughts..
Once again a very beautiful write, Bala :-)
This especially has that expressive quotient. I could feel those emotions and pain you are trying to convey through this write. I loved this stanza...the only stanza that emphasizes how we feel happy when people fighting against all odds reach to heights..how tears can come even when we are extremely happy...
My chest bloats with blurring sights
When my country girl scales new heights
Loved the whole craft..rest of the stanzas belong to one painful saga. I love how you keep trying to write on different topics, this is one of my favorites because it touched my heart.
When I hear about these kind of evil happenings around us, it saddens me. Sometimes we all become so helpless and are just left to ponder. Love those last four ending lines.Thought provoking. Simple but powerful words. Keep up the good work.
Posted 7 Years Ago
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7 Years Ago
Thank you Gorthi, for this very uplifting and encouraging review.. there is something common with hu.. read moreThank you Gorthi, for this very uplifting and encouraging review.. there is something common with human beings .most of us get shaken by the injustice inflicted upon the weak and helpless.. Tears automatically roll down.
Tears show the connect..even animals cannot remain untouched in this aspect.. But it surprises me a lot how some remain unconcerned and may even turn anti. What can one do in such situations?
We can just share our perspectives.
Thank you very much for this wonderful review :-):-)